Hi Zim, welcome to our forum and many thanks for sharing your first essay with us. I understand the points you are trying to make and you can improve your writing if you start using shorter sentences with more verbs and fewer nouns.
As for your arguments you should address the fact that we need to completely change our way of living due to global warming caused by burning fossil fuels. If we continue to burn oil, coal and gas at the current rate your generation won’t be able to live on this planet neither in large cities nor in the countryside. #climate-change