No matter when you are old or young, you always need a friend .An old acquaintance is like a treasure for us. As, they have massive collection of memories. Sometimes, it is difficult to us maintain the same relationship with old friends. So, we need to make new friends.Here,I mention the following reasons:
To begin with, change is consistent. Do you have a same group of friends which you used to play during the childhood? Now for my further explanation, you are able to give true opinion. When I was in school, I had many friends. With whom, I could share everything. When I took admission in the college, I was still dependent on my school friends.I used to call them every weekend. Intially, they were showing interest in me. Gradually, our connection had faded. Lastly,we all lost our contact too. On the other hand, I was not able to make new friends in college as I had same thought I could not make new connection with people.
Secondly, it is indeed to new make friends. Especially, when you are a part of the organisation. You need to increase your group which requires for the exchange of ideas. You cannot live in a fish bowl. Either your a part of a one department, you must have connections with other departments people too. On professional level, you should also learn to limit your friendship.
I conclude that it is good to keep old friends. We only talk them occasionally. So, we have to make new friends when we become a part of new life or new phase. I did not agree with the statement.
I’d say that your essay is a bit of short and you’ve used an awful lot the word “I”. You should not use that word because you will write an academic essay not a diary. When it comes to your ideas, I think you have contradicted yourself. For example, you said that " I conclude that it is good to keep old friends. We only talk them occasionally. So, we have to make new friends when we become a part of new life or new phase. I did not agree with the statement." Examiner, who will read this part of your essay, could not understand what you mean. Therefore, you should justify your ideas truly. I hope my comments can be beneficial for you.
Thanks for your suggestion. I will definitely work on it.
Continuing the discussion from Please analysis my essay TOEFL 2 ( you keep old friends or make new friend):
I have gone through many essay writing sample answers( TOEFL ). They all mention the personal example. To be more specific, they use pronoun
‘l’. Now, I am bit confused. Please, let me know the correct format of essay writing( TOEFL).