Hello sir,
Hope everything is great with you. I was wondering if you would proofread my essay. I appreciate your help.
Thanks in advance,
Mohammad
Some people believe that we learn our most important knowledge in school. Others think that the knowledge we acquire outside of school is the most important. Which view do you agree with?
We acquire our information and knowledge through different means. However, some people are of the opinion that we obtain most of our knowledge in school and I strongly agree with this viewpoint. My reasons and examples listed below will bolster my point of view.
In the first place, there are many skilled teachers in school who can help us learn our lessons. Teachers are people who have been taught how to convey knowledge and information to their students. They are familiar with different kinds of students that they would face and how to treat with them in the best manner. Due to this, they are the most eligible people from whom we can learn our lessons. Furthermore, the material that is discussed in schools have been pondered and deliberated comprehensively to assure that they are beneficial for students in the future. Hence, the knowledge and the way that it is transferred are the best in schools.To illustrate this fact, I like to give an example about my learning math. When I was a child, I had difficulty learning math. However, my teacher helped me a lot to learn my lessons. I am now using that knowledge and the skill that my teacher instilled into me at that time, in many occasions in my life.
Secondly, the knowledge that we learn outside school is not reliable. As we all know, there are many rules and rubrics associated with evaluation of the books that are taught in schools. Hawk-eyed, and erudite people are charged with providing these books. As a result the knowledge in school books, is very reliable. In contrast, the knowledge that we learn outside of schools is not very reliable. In many cases, the information is distorted and biased. It can be illustrated by the time I heard from many of people in different cities in my country that the world will be completely destroyed by 2005. However, my teacher in school, scientifically convinced me that this is a false belief.
In conclusion, we can acquire the most important knowledge in schools because this knowledge has been contemplated thoroughly and is reliable.
TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture in Political Science
Some people believe that we learn our most important knowledge in school. Others think that the knowledge we acquire outside of school is the most important. Which view do you agree with?
We acquire our information and knowledge through different means. However, some people are of the opinion that we obtain most of our knowledge in school and I strongly agree with this viewpoint. My reasons and examples listed below will bolster my point of view.
In the first place, there are many skilled teachers in school who can help us learn our lessons. Teachers are people who have been taught how to convey knowledge and information to their students. They are familiar with different kinds of students that they would face, and how to treat with them in the best manner. Due to this, they are the most eligible people from whom we can learn our lessons. Furthermore, the material that is discussed in schools has been pondered and deliberated comprehensively to assure that it is beneficial for students in the future. Hence, the knowledge and the way that it is transferred are the best in schools.To illustrate this fact, I like to give an example about my learning maths. When I was a child, I had difficulty learning maths. However, my teacher helped me a lot to learn my lessons. I am now using that knowledge and the skill that my teacher instilled into me at that time, in many occasions in my life.
Secondly, the knowledge that we learn outside school is not reliable. As we all know, there are many rules and rubrics associated with evaluation of the books that are taught in schools. Hawk-eyed, and erudite people are charged with providing these books. As a result, the knowledge in school books is very reliable. In contrast, the knowledge that we learn outside of schools is not very reliable. In many cases, the information is distorted and biased. It can be illustrated by the time I heard from many people in different cities in my country that the world will be completely destroyed by 2005. However, my teacher in school, scientifically convinced me that this is a false belief.
In conclusion, we can acquire the most important knowledge in schools because this knowledge has been compiled thoroughly, and is reliable.
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Very good work Mohammad.
Kitos. 9/10
TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture in Political Science
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Mohammad, good job!
I have a suggestion here. Maybe you can change your second point of view into “Secondly, the knowledge that we learn IN schools is MORE reliable”, which is more coherent with your demonstrations that followed it.
I hope I’ve made myself clear. 
Thank you Sallychen. You are absolutely right.Thanks again.
