What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age?

Hallo Kitosdad,

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I’m now back from holiday and started again to write essays. I would appreciate if you correct and rate it!

Thanks a lot!

Marcella

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What change would make your hometown more appealing to people
your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your
opinion.

I live in a mid-sized town in Germany that has many things to offer to people in the age from 20 to 30. It is a good place to study, because it has a good technical university and different libraries that give the students access to knowledge. Besides, it has also many opportunities for young people to spend their spare-time. There are a plenty of places to meet friends, as parks, bars and discotheques and it is surrounded by a wonderful landscape with mountains where you can do some exercises like hiking or mountain-biking. But in my opinion there’s still something missing. It’s a university for Arts and Humanities. In the following paragraphs I’ll provide an overview why I think that a university of Arts and Humanities would make my hometown more appealing to people in the Twenties.

At first a university of Arts and Humanities would bring more women in my town. A general problem in Germany is that more men than women study at a technical university to learn an engineer profession. So it happens quite often, that if you are going to a party you would find a percentage of over 70 % of men. In the opposite, at universities of Arts and Humanities are more women matriculated. Achieving nearly 50 percentage of each gender wouldn’t just make the men happier, it also would lead to a better atmosphere at parties and other places.

Another reason, I would build a university of Arts and Humanities, is that through the new subjects, been taught there, other influences would be brought to my hometown. Simply the meetings and conversations between these different student groups would broaden the horizon of both sites. For example political activations and the public examination of contempary issues are very rare at my hometown, which I would expect to change with students educated in this area.

Furthermore it would give both sides the opportunity to get knowledge in other science areas by visiting the lectures in which they are interested in like literature or philosophy courses. This is for me an important issue, because at work most of the people have also to handle with technical as well as with social or ethical problems. I just want to mention the genetic manipulation and its controversy with the Ethics.

In conclusion, a university of Arts and Humanities in my hometown would change the life of people in my age immensely. As, such a university would increase the percentage of women here and it would bring another view of life. Furthermore it would prepare the students better for the upcoming work. All of the things that I mentioned would increase the variety of my city and therefore the attractiveness of it for other people would increase as well.

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What change would make your home-town more appealing to people
your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your
opinion.

I live in a mid-sized town in Germany that has many things to offer to people in the ageS BETWEEN TWENTY to THIRTY.
It is a good place to study, because it has a good technical university and different libraries that give the students access to knowledge.
Besides, it has also many opportunities for young people to spend their spare-time. There are plenty of places to meet friends, SUCH as parks, bars and discotheques and it is surrounded by a wonderful landscape with mountains where you can do some exercises like hiking or mountain-biking.
But in my opinion there IS still something missing, THAT IS, a university for Arts and Humanities.
In the following paragraphs I WILL provide an overview AS TO why I think that a University of Arts and Humanities would make my home-town more appealing to people in theIR twenties.

FIRSTLY, a University of Arts and Humanities would bring more women inTO my town.
A general problem in Germany is that THERE ARE more men than women studyING at a technical university to learn an engineerING profession. So it happens quite often, that if you are going to a party you would find a percentage of over SEVENTY PERCENT of men PRESENT.
ON THE OTHER HAND, at universities of Arts and Humanities THERE are more women matriculated. Achieving nearly FIFTY percent of each gender would NOT ONLY make the men happier, it also would lead to a better atmosphere at parties and other places.

Another reason I would build a University of Arts and Humanities, is that through the new subjects beING taught there, other influences would be brought to my home-town, and that is that the meetings and conversations between these different student groups would broaden the horizon of both sites.
For example, political activations and the public examination of (contemporary) issues are very rare at my home-town.
I would expect to change with students educated in this area.

Furthermore it would give both GENDERS the opportunity to GAIN knowledge in other science areas by visiting the lectures in which they are interested, like literature or philosophy courses.
This is for me an important issue, because at work most of the people have also to handle BOTH technical AND social or ethical problems.
I just want to mention the genetic manipulation and its controversy with the Ethics.

In conclusion, a University of Arts and Humanities in my home-town would change the life of people in my age immensely, BECAUSEsuch a university would increase the percentage of women here and it would bring another view of life.
Furthermore it would prepare the students better for the upcoming work. All of the things that I mentioned would increase the APPEAL of my city and therefore the attractiveness of it for other people would increase as well.

Good Marcellas. I’d give you 7.5 / 10
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Thanks Kitosdad!

I’m very happy about your rate and very grateful for your corrections! :slight_smile:

Marcella

Wow, That’s a great essay, congratulate!