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Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Students have to wear their uniforms when going to schools.
Essay:
No one can deny the important of wearing school uniform because each school has its own uniform that represents for the school’s image and prestige. However, the issue that students have to wear their uniforms when going to schools is still controversial. While some people hold a belief that wearing school uniform is not a good idea, since they think that it means these schools deprive students’ rights to choose what they want to wear and what clothes are fit for them, some of others think that wearing school uniform should be mandatory. In my perspective, I would go for the latter point of view for the following reasons.
Firstly, by wearing school uniform, students can be proud of their schools. Every morning when they stand in front of a mirror and look at their school uniforms, they can feel a sense of craving for going to their school and meet others. Furthermore, when going outside with their school uniform put on, pass-by people can recognize what schools they are studying in by looking at the school logos. What a great feeling when your neighbor greets you and calls your school name with an admiring sound right after looking at your school uniform!
Secondly, there will be no gap between rural and rich students when they all wear school uniform. Lots of students who come from countryside feel a sense of inferiority complex when looking at the rich ones wearing luxurious and fashionable garments and boutiques; they do not have courage to approach and talk with the fancy ones comfortably, resulting in an uncomfortable and uncoordinated studying environment. In contrast, when all of the students are required to wear the same clothes to go to schools, there will be no intangible distant between them, leading in the fact that they can develop their friendships and be more focused on their studies.
Finally, schools can teach their students a sense of discipline when mandating a rule telling that wearing school uniforms is compulsory. Every time when students put on their clothes before going to classes, they have to bear in their minds that the clothes they should pick is their school uniforms not the other stylish and well-made apparels/attires. Being taught this lesson everyday, students can gradually form a good habit and attitude that can be very beneficial and crucial for them in the future when they have to obey many rules in their companies and in the society.
To sum up, school uniform is different from other attires because it plays a very important role in the students’ lives. Not only can wearing school uniform shorten the gap between the rich and poor students, but also it can teach them how to obey a rule with a good manner.
TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two students in their dormitory during registration week
