TPO 49 - Question 1

[Tesoke]

Hi, would you please evaluate and score that following essay, related to TPO 49 that I attached the reading and listening. I did not revised the writing after the exam to get my real score. So it might be full of errors. Sorry and Thanks a lot.

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essay
The article chiefly states that humpback whales might migrate long distances through navigating by the stars and it boslsters this idea with three reasons. In contrast, the lecturer contends that this mentality is completely debatabe, citing three diverse reasons to contradict the points made in the reading passage.

First of all, the text specifies that humpback whales’ brain help them to use stars to navigate by. Conversely, it is stated by the speaker that there is no strict connection between the level of intelligence and this ability, navigation by stars. For example, some ducks which use stars for similar porpuse, have average intelligence but they can do this instinctively.

Furthermore, it is emphasized in the reading that migrating in straight lines prove that humpback whales use stars for so; nevertheless, the professor casts doubt on this point by stating that, beside stars, some external forces might help animals to navigate. For example some animals which have sensitive bodies to magnetic field of the earth use it to navigate while migration.

Finally, the article makes it clear that humpback whales sometimes float straight up and it means that they look at the stars to navigate by. On the contrary, it is mentioned by the speaker that some animals like sharks, which never migerate, do the same action but to hunt and not navigate by the stars. Sharks also look up in days, when stars are not visible, and it proves that this is a pure exploration action.

TOEFL listening lectures: What makes ‘The Canterbury Tales’ easier to understand?

[Luschen]

Hi, I think you did a good job on this one - you have the right format and have captured most of the points from the lecture. I realize it is not important to write down everything from the reading, but you do have to have enough detail to make the contrast with the lecture clear. In your case, I think you needed to add just a little more from the reading - see below. You also missed a few small details and got one detail wrong - see my comments below.

@Tesoke

Hi, would you please evaluate and score that following essay, related to TPO 49 that I attached the reading and listening. I did not revised the writing after the exam to get my real score. So it might be full of errors. Sorry and Thanks a lot.

Listening part
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essay
The article chiefly states that humpback whales might migrate long distances through navigating by the stars and it [bolsters] this idea with three reasons. In contrast, the lecturer contends that this mentality {“mentality” isn’t the best word here - it means outlook more than idea} is completely [debatable], citing three diverse reasons to contradict the points made in the reading passage.

First of all, the text specifies that humpback whales’ brain[s ] help them to use stars to navigate by. {I would add what in particular about the brain shows this - that is is complex with great cognitive ability} Conversely, it is stated by the speaker that there is no strict connection between the level of intelligence and this ability, navigation by stars. For example, some ducks which use stars for [a ]similar [purpose], have average intelligence but they can do this instinctively.

Furthermore, it is emphasized in the reading that migrating in straight lines prove[s ] that humpback whales use stars for so {once again, I would add a little more - because only by orienting themselves to an external force or object can they do so}; nevertheless, the professor casts doubt on this point by stating that, beside stars, some [different] external forces might help animals to navigate. For example some animals which have sensitive bodies to magnetic field of the earth use it to navigate while migration. {Make sure to add the point that whales have a magnetic substance in their brain, which implies that they can sense magnetic fields and use it for guidance}

Finally, the article makes it clear that humpback whales sometimes float straight up and it means that they look at the stars to navigate by. {a main point in the lecture is that other animals also do this, so it is important to say that the reading says this behavior is very unusual} On the contrary, it is mentioned by the speaker that some animals like sharks, which never [migrate], do the same action but to hunt and not navigate by the stars. Sharks [Whales] also look up in days,{“during the day” in “in the daytime”} when stars are not visible, and it proves that this is a pure exploration action. {this last point is wrong - the lecturer says thinking they navigate this way is “pure speculation”, which is different from “exploration”}

TOEFL listening lectures: What makes ‘The Canterbury Tales’ easier to understand?

[Luschen]

Hi, I think you did a good job on this one - you have the right format and have captured most of the points from the lecture. I realize it is not important to write down everything from the reading, but you do have to have enough detail to make the contrast with the lecture clear. In your case, I think you needed to add just a little more from the reading - see below. You also missed a few small details and got one detail wrong - see my comments below.

@Tesoke

Hi, would you please evaluate and score that following essay, related to TPO 49 that I attached the reading and listening. I did not revised the writing after the exam to get my real score. So it might be full of errors. Sorry and Thanks a lot.

Listening part
opload.ir/downloadf-ff913bcab6a81-mp3.html
For downloading the listening part, after going to the mentioned address, you should wait 10 second and then you can download them by clicking on the green rectangular.

essay
The article chiefly states that humpback whales might migrate long distances through navigating by the stars and it [bolsters] this idea with three reasons. In contrast, the lecturer contends that this mentality {“mentality” isn’t the best word here - it means outlook more than idea} is completely [debatable], citing three diverse reasons to contradict the points made in the reading passage.

First of all, the text specifies that humpback whales’ brain[s ] help them to use stars to navigate by. {I would add what in particular about the brain shows this - that is is complex with great cognitive ability} Conversely, it is stated by the speaker that there is no strict connection between the level of intelligence and this ability, navigation by stars. For example, some ducks which use stars for [a ]similar [purpose], have average intelligence but they can do this instinctively.

Furthermore, it is emphasized in the reading that migrating in straight lines prove[s ] that humpback whales use stars for so {once again, I would add a little more - because only by orienting themselves to an external force or object can they do so}; nevertheless, the professor casts doubt on this point by stating that, beside stars, some [different] external forces might help animals to navigate. For example some animals which have sensitive bodies to magnetic field of the earth use it to navigate while migration. {Make sure to add the point that whales have a magnetic substance in their brain, which implies that they can sense magnetic fields and use it for guidance}

Finally, the article makes it clear that humpback whales sometimes float straight up and it means that they look at the stars to navigate by. {a main point in the lecture is that other animals also do this, so it is important to say that the reading says this behavior is very unusual} On the contrary, it is mentioned by the speaker that some animals like sharks, which never [migrate], do the same action but to hunt and not navigate by the stars. Sharks [Whales] also look up in days,{“during the day” in “in the daytime”} when stars are not visible, and it proves that this is a pure exploration action. {this last point is wrong - the lecturer says thinking they navigate this way is “pure speculation”, which is different from “exploration”}

TOEFL listening lectures: What makes ‘The Canterbury Tales’ easier to understand?

[Tesoke]

Thank you but what about my score? I need to know it too. Thanks a lot.

[Luschen]

I think it might score at the 4 level, but probably a 3.5 is more likely, so 20-22 out of 30.