TPO 21 - Question 1

[Tesoke]

Would you please evaluate the following essay. Thanks a lot.

Essay
The article chiefly states that Genetic modification can improve trees and help them to survive and also helps farmer to get more fruits and it bolsters this idea with three reason. In contrast, the lecturer contends that this mentality is completely debatable, citing three diverse reasons to contradict the points made in the reading passage.

First of all, the text specifies taht genetically modified trees are more likel to survive in harder situations. Conversely, it is stated by speaker that it is not completely tree, because genetic experts change tree genes to help tree only for one specific problem. Then this uniform genetically modified trees are not harder for other problems and another problem may leads all of those tree to wite out completely, while some of non-uniform trees can survive in each different problem.

Furthermore, it is emphasized in the reading that genetically modified trees help farmer to earn more money, while those trees grow faster, give more fruit and so on. Nevertheless, the professor casts doubt on this point by stating that farmer will be obligated to spend more money to componies to buy new genetically modified seeds. The companies also try to modify seeds for other changes again and farmer have to pay money again and again, so they cannot earn more money via using genetecally modified seeds.

Finally, the article makes it clear that genetically modified tress can prevent overexploitation of wild trees and farmer can use them instead of cutting unique or rare species. On the contrary, it is mentioned by the speaker that genetically modified trees grow faster and aggrasively, they are designed for that, and so may use more resources such as water and soil and this may prevent original tree to grow and leads them to wite out.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two students (2)

[Luschen]

Hi, another good essay. You got most of the points here, but you did have some problems with the second body paragraph. Also you had a few more minor errors in this one. Still, I think it might score a 4 out of 5. Here is the link for the reading and lecture:

toefl.kaomanfen.com/question/02 … 9325k.html

@Tesoke

Would you please evaluate the following essay. Thanks a lot.

Essay
The article chiefly states that [g]enetic modification can improve trees and help them to survive and also helps farmer[s ] to get {“produce” or “harvest” are better choices here} more fruits and it bolsters this idea with three reason[s ]. In contrast, the lecturer contends that this mentality is completely debatable, citing three diverse reasons to contradict the points made in the reading passage.

First of all, the text specifies [that] genetically modified trees are more [likely] to survive in harder {“harsher” is better} situations. Conversely, it is stated by [the] speaker that [this] is not completely tr[ue], because genetic experts change tree genes to help tree[s ] only for one specific problem. Then this uniform genetically modified trees are not [hardier in terms of] for other problems and another problem may lea[d ] all of those tree[s ] to [be wiped] out completely, while some of [the] non-uniform trees can survive in [the face of] each different problem. {or more simply - “can survive each threat”} [s ]

Furthermore, it is emphasized in the reading that genetically modified trees help farmer[s ] to earn more money,[since] those trees grow faster, give more fruit and so on. Nevertheless, the professor casts doubt on this point by stating that farmer[s ] will be obligated to spend [give] {you spend money on things that you buy, not on the company - unless you are buying the company! }more money to [companies] to buy new genetically modified seeds. {well, the main point is that these seeds are much more expensive than standard seeds} The companies also try to modify seeds [to make] other changes again and farmer[s ] have to pay money again and again, so they cannot earn more money via using genetecally modified seeds. {you sort of missed the second point here. The lecture says that farmers are not allowed to keep the seeds that they grow from their trees and replant them the next year. Instead, they have to buy new seeds from the company every year.}

Finally, the article makes it clear that genetically modified tress can prevent overexploitation of wild trees and farmer[s ]can use them instead of cutting unique or rare species. On the contrary, it is mentioned by the speaker that genetically modified trees grow faster and [more] [aggresively;] they are designed for that, and so may use more resources such as water and soil and this may prevent original tree[s from growing] to grow and leads them to [be crowded] out.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two students (2)

[Tesoke]

Thank you so much. Bless you.

[Luschen]

Good luck to you on the test Tesoke! Stay relaxed and you’ll do great. Please let us know how it goes.