hi, everyone!. I’m learning to prepare for the toefl ibt test. I have many essays that I wrote, but I don’t know they are good or not. I hope that everyone can help me to fix and give comment for me. Thank a lot.
my first essays:
topics: highways or transportation.
my essays:
When asked about which the government should do when it receives amount of money, many people have different ideas. They can choose to support for the facilities such as the roads and highways. But other people think that they should use this money to upgrade the vehicles and public transportation such as buses and underground. Personally speaking, I support for the second idea because of some reasons follow.
First, you can see the advantages of building more highway and roads. They will increase the potential of transportation. It means that goods and people will be transfer faster, so it will save a lot of time for people to do many things. Over all it will stimulate the national economy. I remember the time that I was very young, moving from my hometown to Ho Chi Minh City took about one day by train while it is just about 500 km. Fortunately, the government invest a lot of money to build a new high way to connect my hometown to HCMC, so now, it just takes about 6 hours to do this. Furthermore, highway means that no other roads cut the highway, many vehicles just drive in one direction so lessen the accident related to road.
However, the advantages of upgrading the public transportation surpass the highway’s one. The first and clearly reason is that it will reduce the traffic congestion in the city. So no more air pollution or sound pollution can be faced with. As the result the physical and mental health of the citizens will be improved a lot. Besides that many people will save a huge amount of money for spending the cost of fuel such as gas, oil, diesel, parking fee and especially the insurance for their cars. In my country, the insurance for cars is very high about 100 $ per year, that’s not acceptable in my country because my country is a developing country.
Besides that, there is also more important reason why I choose to improve the public transportation. That is it will encourage sense of community. If people travel and go to work by their own cars, there are no more chances for them to interact with each other. But when you go to work by buses, it seems to be changed a lot. People have many things to discuss, from their own family problem to the result of the football match last night for example. All in all, the relationship between people will improve a lot.
In conclusion, when taking into account all these merits and drawbacks that I have numerated we may safely arrive at the conclusion that the advantages of upgrading the public transportation overcomes the highway’s ones. Not only does it save the environment, but also it warms up the relationship between people.
TOEFL listening lectures: A lecture from a social studies class