Topic: Men and women are equal. Do you agree or disagree?
- looking for detail grammar checking ^^. thanks a lot!
Men have been the major labour force in all over the world since very long time ago. They are people who are often described by words as powerfulness, confidence, independence but women vice versa. This essay will present some reasons why men and women are not equal.
The first issue is that women still earn less than men in many situations. Men obviously are stronger than women so they probably have abilities to do more jobs which may include high salary but extra danger. For example, the more people often work in chemical industries or construction site are men. Additionally, looking at international sport, easily to see more successful professional male leagues than their male counterparts.
Another major reason bases on the possibility that women might become pregnant. That means they have a constant responsibility to become a mother and take care of their children. It accidently is obstacles for women to keep their work progress continuing because pregnant issue usually takes at least a year to get them back the workplaces. Furthermore, while women are pregnant they need to stay away some occupations which are in noxious environment or physical activity requirement.
The final reason is that woman characteristics could not be changed as well as man. That means women are too sensitive, feeble, and dependent on everything around them. Doing housework and taking of children instead of going out to work like their husbands which are things belong to women from hundreds of years of history. While men could think profoundly and solve problems in right ways, women are unconfident to decide to do anything because of shyness or lack of knowledge.
In conclusion, men and women are not truly equal in the workforce and the responsibility with their family. Women earn less than men constantly, possibly become pregnant and difficultly in order to get success with their characteristics. The modern life lead increasing living standard so women might have more opportunities to take care of their family and improve their knowledge as well.
TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor of Animal Behaviour
Topic: Men and women are equal. Do you agree or disagree?
- looking for detail grammar checking ^^. thanks a lot!
Men have been the major labour force in all over the world since very long time ago. They are people who are often described by words as powerfulness, confidence, independence but women vice versa. This essay will present some reasons why men and women are not equal.
The first issue is that women still earn less than men in many situations. Men obviously are stronger than women so they probably have abilities to do more jobs which may include highER salary but extra danger. For example, the MOST people WHO often work in chemical industries or ON construction siteS are men. Additionally, looking at international sport, IT IS easY to see more successful professional male leagues than their FEmale counterparts.
Another major reason IS baseD on the possibility that women might become pregnant. That means they have a constant responsibility to become a mother and take care of their children. It accidently is AN obstacle for women to keep their work progress continuing because pregnanCY issueS usually takes at least a year to get them back TO the workplaces. Furthermore, while women are pregnant they need to stay away FROM some occupations THAT are in A noxious environment or REQUIRE physical activity.
The final reason is that womEn’S characteristics CANNOT be changed as EASILY as MENS. That means women are too sensitive, feeble, and dependent on everything around them. Doing housework and taking CARE of children instead of going out to work like their husbands, which are things belong to THAT WOMEN HAVE DONE THROUGHOUT hundreds of years of history. While men could think profoundly and solve problems in right ways, women are NOT confident WHEN decidING to do anything, because of shyness or lack of knowledge.
In conclusion, men and women are not truly equal in the workforce. and the responsibility with their family. Women earn far less than men constantly, possibly become pregnant and HAVE difficultly in TRYING to get success with their characteristics. The modern life leadS TO increasing living standardS, so women might have more opportunities to take care of their family and improve their knowledge as well.
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You tried very hard Tantong to make a success of this essay, but at the moment you still lack the ability to write with confidence. Keep posting your work. You will surely improve, but only if you learn from your mistakes.
Kitos. 7/10
Thanks a lot Kito! I keep trying ^^.
The first issue is that women still earn less than men in many situations. Men obviously are stronger than women so they probably have abilities to do more jobs which may include highER salary but extra danger. For example, the MOST people WHO often work in chemical industries or ON construction siteS are men. Additionally, looking at international sport, IT IS easY to see more successful professional male leagues than their FEmale counterparts.
Another major reason IS baseD on the possibility that women might become pregnant. That means they have a constant responsibility to become a mother and take care of their children. It accidently is AN obstacle for women to keep their work progress continuing because pregnanCY issueS usually takes at least a year to get them back TO the workplaces. Furthermore, while women are pregnant they need to stay away FROM some occupations THAT are in A noxious environment or REQUIRE physical activity.
The final reason is that womEn’S characteristics CANNOT be changed as EASILY as MENS. That means women are too sensitive, feeble, and dependent on everything around them. Doing housework and taking CARE of children instead of going out to work like their husbands, which are things belong to THAT WOMEN HAVE DONE THROUGHOUT hundreds of years of history. While men could think profoundly and solve problems in right ways, women are NOT confident WHEN decidING to do anything, because of shyness or lack of knowledge.
In conclusion, men and women are not truly equal in the workforce. and the responsibility with their family. Women earn far less than men constantly, possibly become pregnant and HAVE difficultly in TRYING to get success with their characteristics. The modern life leadS TO increasing living standardS, so women might have more opportunities to take care of their family and improve their knowledge as well.
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You tried very hard Tantong to make a success of this essay, but at the moment you still lack the ability to write with confidence. Keep posting your work. You will surely improve, but only if you learn from your mistakes.
Kitos. 7/10
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