TOEFL speaking section: How birthdays are celebrated in your country?

Explain how birthdays are celebrated in your country. Use specific examples and details in your explanation.

In my country, birthdays are celebrated every year but the most important birthday is a jubilee. In contrast to usual birthday celebrating, it is more interesting and more important to participate in this party. This could be celebrated at home or in a restaurant. The person wears a strong white dress with accurately brushed hair. There are a lot of people, surrounding the person celebrating his name day, give various presents and wishes. Then the family members invite guests to celebrate the birthday. And there is music and dancing and food. Traditionally, only relatives and close friends stay until late at night, sometimes even until the morning, but many more people leave the party earlier.

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TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a professor and his assistant

This is a paragraph not an essay.

As far as I am concerned, it is not a good idea to write a paragraph for the speaking section and memorize it by heart.

Remember it is about how you say not what you say.

Best of luck

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