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Do you agree or disagree with the statement that it is always right for governments to ask people to move their businesses and houses to provide space for the construction of large structures (new roads, new dams, etc).
With the need for economic development in big cities, people are usually requested to move their businesses and houses elsewhere to provide space for the construction of large structures. Some people think that it is always right for governments to do so. But the others hold an opposite opinion. From my perspective, the government’s rights are given by its fellow citizens. If its proposal for erecting edifices and infrastructures such as roads and parks is illegitimate, it has no right to enforce the requirements. In other words, it could only be right for the government to do so when its schemes are reasonable and accepted by most of its fellow citizens, but not always.
Governments do not have the absolute right to ask people to move. However, they could gain the supporting from a majority of affected people by the following steps. To begin with, conducting a poll is a necessary step for the governments to find out peoples’ opinions on moving from their houses and businesses. Moreover, if a majority of people are not willing to move, the governments should consider offering some reasonable subsidies for companies or new houses for the property owners. Furthermore, a negotiation meeting between governments and people, who are asked to leave where they live or do business, could be held if the aforementioned resolutions could not achieve their goal. For example, I am living in the countryside of Guangzhou in China, where is on the government’s plans 2021 for rural urbanization. Almost all the villagers disagreed with the compensation of moving out of the village at the very beginning. After several times of negotiations, a lion’s share of villagers accepted the providing solution from governments and the rest of the villagers eventually agreed as well. Therefore, when individuals are in the face of state interest, they would consider compromising on the government’s offer if it is reasonable, otherwise, they would vigorously defend their benefits against the government. The government would put itself in people’s shoes to come up with a satisfying solution eventually.
Governments are not always right. If people are compelled to agree on whatever decisions are made by the government, they might rebel against the harsh government ultimately. Looking through the world history world, people from all over the world were fighting for the sake of their personal rights regardless of sacrificing their life, which in turn had a negative influence on its economy, politic, and culture. Besides, the existence of a government is to deliver a better life for its citizens rather than ruin their life. The government should not develop its economy at the expense of the advantages of the minority. I remember that, when rural urbanization was first implemented in the country, some local authorities knocked down peoples’ houses without their agreement, for the purpose of handing in a great political performance to the central government. This event caused great attention from the whole country as a consequence of the protest from the indignant villagers, who refused to work and caused a great loss to factories. Hence, governments are not always entitled to ask for people to meet their requirements.
In short, not all the decisions or actions from the governments are correct. A prestigious government should hear the voice of its people. Only in this way can the government become greater and stronger.