Topic : Sometimes people think they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think it is always better with a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develope your essay
Please evaluate my essay by the criterions of ETS:
1Effectively addresses the topic and task
2Well-organized and well-developed , using clearly appropriate explainations , examplifications and/ or details
3* Display unity , progression and coherence
4* Display consistent facility the use of language , demonstrating syntactic variety , appropriate word choice, Idiomaticity , though it may have minor lexical or gramatical errors
I just would like to know where I am standing , how weak each criterion is in details
Thankyou in advance
There is a controversial idea about whether people should have a teacher or not . Some people argue that it is better to learn by themselves because that makes them more creative , forcing them to work independently . However , in my opinion , like many people , it is much better if we study with a teacher . My statement will be supported in three aspects : teachers navigate us in the learning process , teachers an help us to succeed in attaining knowledge in a much shorter time comparing to learning ourselves , teachers can give us the professional skills that we can not get by ourselves
First , a teacher can navigate us through the learning process that it would be hard for us to learn by ourselves . When we try to deal with a problem , at first we try in some ways , and the teacher can give us a hint us that which ways we can’tet the solution , which way we can get the solution . S/he will explain why and this is very important because we will save a lot of precious time compared to learning by ourselves to absorb the same final knowledge . Furthermore , our errors can be correct gradually by the teacher making us more confident to get the final result .
Second , There is a fact that we can learn from teachers in the ways that they solve the solutions , the past experiences , all these are very important because we never achieve if we learn by themselves . For instance , in doing a graduate thesis , If a student try to solve by himself , he may be has to struggle for a long time , and If he is lucky , he could finish his thesis. However the knowledge he is going to get is relatively small comparing to having a teacher and he always wonder “Is that best solution , is that the best way to deal with it , are there other ways “
Thirdly , there are a lot of people who has precious skills in aspects we want to learn even we could not imagine if we are not open minded to learn . On the other hand if we learn by ourselves we are isolated from the useful skills . For instances , a man is about to become a musician . If he learn by himself maybe finally he know how to play music , surely that he is never well-known , and all of his skill he owns can not be sharpened
All in all , I strongly agree that we should have a teacher rather than learn by ourselves because we will instruct , spend our time wisely , as well as we want to have or even be aware the master skills in the areas that we concern
TOEFL listening lectures: A lecture by a professor of Archeology