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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and examples to support your statement.
Nowadays, it is undeniable that technology becomes a part of our lives. Technology has a considerable impact on many aspects of our lives, changes the way we live, or even dramatically changes the world. Furthermore, it makes our life easier in many ways and makes our world to be a better place to live. It helps increase food and agricultural productivity, helps connect every part of the world together, and helps improve our living and health quality.
Technology helps increase food productivity. It helps improve the agricultural methods so that we can harvest more rice, crop, etc. As the world population is getting bigger, food productivity and starvation is one of the most important concerns, especially for people living in remote areas. Nevertheless, with the help of technology, we will have enough food for everyone. Technology not only helps increase the productivity, but it also helps increase the variety of foods and makes some kind of fruits and vegetables available on specific seasons to be available all year. Furthermore, we can preserve foods or leftovers for another day in freezers or refrigerators. Therefore, we can cook only once and preserve them for many days.
Furthermore, the communication and information technology really helps connect the world together. Nowadays, many parents may have to work far from their children or their children may study in other city or country. Each of family members could stay in touch by talking via cell phone regardless of the distance between them. Although they are far from each other, they can share problems, share happiness, and express their affections. These will help build up relationships between family members.
Last but not least, with the advance of the transportation technology, we can easily go to remote places and the faraway places where we have never been before with very less time. We will have a chance to go traveling to many other places which will broaden our experiences and extend our perspectives. Regarding the business aspect, transportation could help facilitate merchandise distribution and deliver goods faster. Furthermore, consuming products, medicines are available and easily accessible even in remote areas. As a result, both sellers and buyers are happy because sellers can sell more products to many places, and buyers or consumers can access every kind of products regardless of the place they live in. Consequently, the living and health quality will be extremely improved with the help of technology.
Technology helps improve our world in many aspects. It helps provide enough foods for people from every part of the world, helps connect the world together, and help increase our living and health quality. There are still many other advantages and examples why technology plays a vital role in changing our world and we will strongly agree that technology really changes the world to be a better and friendlier place for us forever.
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