TOEFL essay: Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think.

[J1m_My18]

Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer?

Some people like funny movies because they could forget their problems and worries during watching these films. Others prefer to watch some serious movies. There are some advantages and disadvantages of both type of movie, but in my opinion, serious movies are preferable to movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. In the following essay, I will explain my choice.

First of all, movies, designed to think about, are able to open your eyes about some problems on earth. For example, I watched the film „City of God“ some years ago. The movie deals intensively with the problems of young south Americans living in slums. This film helps me to realize that I can be very happy to live in a country in which crime, violence or drugs are not normal and that this circumstance gives you the responsibility for helping others. As a consequence, after I watched this film I became a member of amnesty international. Therefore, I think that a good serious film are able to open your eyes about problems in the world.

Secondly, you can learn a lot of things in serious movies. For instance, if you watch some documentaries about a country, you will learn a lot about the culture and the inhabitants of this country. Moreover, documentaries help you to improve your knowledge and level of education, which will help you to be successful in school or study.

Finally, I believe that serious movies improve communications between friends and family. In my experiences, people discuss more about a serious movie than about a funny movie due to serious movies are more complex than movie are designed to entertain. Hence, people want to talk about the film they have watched, because they have some question about the sophisticated plot of the film.

In conclusion, I prefer watching a serious movie more than seeing a funny movie. Serious movies have the capability to change opinions of people and therefore they are able to make the world to a better place.

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Thanks!!!

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[Aitorzl]

@J1m_My18

Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer?

Some people like funny movies because they could b[/b] forget their problems and worries during b[/b] watching these films b[/b]. Others prefer to watch some serious movies. There are some advantages and disadvantages of both type of movie, but in my opinion, serious movies are preferable to movies b[/b] are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. In the following essay, I will explain my choice.

First of all, movies, designed to think about (designed to make you think), are able to open your eyes about some problems on earth. For example, I watched the film „City of God“ some years ago. The movie deals intensively with the problems of young south Americans living in slums. This film helps b me to realize that I can b[/b] be very happy to live in a country in which crime, violence or drugs are not normal and that this circumstance gives you the responsibility for helping others. As a consequence, after I watched this film I became a member of amnesty international. Therefore, I think that a good serious film are b able to open your eyes about b[/b] problems in the world.

Secondly, you can learn a lot of things b[/b] serious movies. For instance, if you watch some documentaries about a country, you will learn a lot about the culture and the inhabitants of this country. Moreover, documentaries help you to improve your knowledge and level of education, which will help you to be successful in school or study.

Finally, I believe that serious movies improve communications between friends and family. In my experiences, people discuss more about a serious movie than (they do) about a funny movie due to (the fact) serious movies are more complex than movieb[/b] b[/b] are designed to entertain. Hence, people want to talk about the film they have watched, because they have some question about the sophisticated plot of the film.

In conclusion, I prefer watching a serious movie more than seeing a funny movie. Serious movies have the capability to change (of changing) opinions of people and therefore they are able to make the world to a better place.

Please rate my essays!!

Thanks!!!

well written J1m_My18; I think you made your point clear; maybe you could improve the way you structure your sentences…
This is the first time I rate an essay, I’m not a teacher… I’m just practicing toefl essays like you
For sure, kitostad or Richard can do it better…

all the best…

Aitor

[J1m_My18]

Thank you very much for proof-reading. I agree completely with your correction.

Cheers,
jimmy

[Svbla]

I think the 1st pro is the length of this essay not long enough. ETS requires the appropriate essay 300 words. Your passage is too short.

[Richard]

@Aitorzl

@J1m_My18

Secondly, you can learn a lot of things (by watching) serious movies.

Finally, I believe that serious movies improve communications between friends and family. In my experiences, people discuss more about a serious movie than (they do) about a funny movie due to (due to the fact that) serious movies are more complex than movieb[/b] b[/b] are designed to entertain

thank you Aitorzl.
it’s kind of you…
Good luck

[Richard]

@J1m_My18

but in my opinion, serious movies are (preferable=able to be improved or made perfect) what did you mean? to movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. In the following essay(you mean in the next essay?), I will explain my choice.

Each has its pros and cons, however in my opinion serious movies are more beneficial in comparison with/to the ones that…

@J1m_My18

some(a few) years ago.
This film helps me to realize that I can be very happy to live in a country in which (rate of) crime, violence or drugs are not normal
t the sophisticated plot of the film.= what do you mean???

In conclusion, I prefer watching( I prefer to watch) a serious movie more than seeing(watch) a funny movie. Serious movies have the capability to change opinions of people and therefore they are able to make the world to a better place. (If they have the Idea, aside from ones that have solely produced for making money)

well-written in comparison with your previous essays.
many thanks

[Tomasito]

I totaly agree with the supporting ideas you mentioned in your essay. Documentaries increase our level of education and funny movies make us feel happies, however you forgot to talk about the fiction movies, which fill our mind with strange and imaginative creatures. I’d like to here from you what you think about this kind of movie.

[Richard]

Thank you Tomasito

@Tomasito

I totalyb[/b] agree with the supporting ideas you mentioned in your essay. Documentaries increase our level of education(you meant knowledge?) and funny movies make us feel happiesb[/b], however you forgot to talk about the fiction movies, which fill our mind with strange and imaginative creatures. I’d like to here from you what you think about this kind of movie.

I agree with you.
In my opinion, watching fiction-style movies is waste of time.
you used to write essays. keep up with good job.
Hope to see an essay with interesting topic from you.
Good luck.

[Tomasito]

Hello Jack!
Thank you for your correction.
I’m preparing a new essay about an interesting topic. It’ll be ready until friday.

[Goldyyy]

A lot of people like to watch films,which give for us many information.And i agree that films can tell us a lot about the country where they were made.So, in the next lines of my essay i will try to prove my opinion by specific arguments.

Firs of all,movies reflect the culture,political and social life of the particular country. For example Indian,Arabian and Mexican have really clear and unique traditions.And films could show traditional dances,songs,meals and other things.Also,some movies reflect what is invaluable in country it could be rich man and poor women wedding,love for other country people and etc.Sometimes,the movies show the biggest problems and disasters of country.

Secondly,films demonstrate the particular country nature.In some scenes we could just watch the environmental.For example in many different films,which made in USA are show statue of liberty or big buildings.And when people see this symbols,they know where particular film made.This example proves that everyone films present country and show most popular buildings.

In conclusion, everyone movies help to better know particular country.Some films demonstrate nature and most important valuable things in all world.Another reflect traditions,values, disasters, characters of peoples and many other things,which help get a lot of information and see many countries.