following torstens advice i have written my first essay for about 4 years. it would be great if someone could correct the errors. (maybe someone even could tell me how much points (1 to 5) i would receive for this essay?)
“People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.”
There are a variety of reasons for people to go to a college or university. In this essay I will point out some of the most important reasons.
In times where a lot of people are unemployed it’s really important to get the best education possible. Attending a college or university is an excellent way to achieve a high education and avoid getting unemployed.
Another important point for people going to a college or university is self-fulfillment. Some people have a great thirst for knowledge which only can be satisfied with high education. People within this group have the highest motivation and often u can find the best students among this group.
With every attended course and every passed exam they feel better and after graduation they are very proud of themselves and their achievements. This inner proud will last for the rest of their lives and will strengthen their self-confidence.
On the other hand I am quite sure that also a lot of people just study to increase their career chances. The motivation for people within this group are often certain material goods like houses or cars. I really doubt that studying for this reason is a good motivation because you won’t put your heart into the study.
The last reason I can imagine for people going to a college or university is because they are forced by their parents. Parents who graduated and are successful at their professions or even lead a successful business sometimes tend to project their views on their children. In extreme cases this can lead to the incident that the parents send their child to a university without asking the child what it wants to do. It may be possible that the child graduates because it doesn’t want to disappoint the parents but in most cases forcing someone to study is really a bad idea and wont work.
All in all I think studying for self-fulfillment is definitely the best motivation for a successful study.
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