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Question: What famous place would you like to visit? Use details and reasons to support your response.
[size=125]Last year, world economy has become crisis but it did not affect to my family. It was the reason that the cost of every tour was decreasing and my parrents decided to give me chance for travelling to China. So Great Wall was my only choice because this place contains many intesting things about Chinese including their beautifulness and culture.
When you are there, you will be surprised at this imposing sight. From the beginning, you can see that Great Wall has many long ways to big citadels. The total length is over 50,000 km, it’s the unbelievable number. Moreover, you can spot that Great Wall was set in the very beautiful mountains. I said it is my only choosing because I really want to walk along this way and see how nice it is. Not just that, I can take a lot of picture with my family, especially my lovely sister.
In addition to the imposing sight, you also be amazing with Great Wall’s history. It was built through many centuries. The first King of Chinese Tan Thuy Hoang, the cruelest King, allowed to build it to prevent invader and other tribe out side China. This is the second think I like about Great Wall because it likes the symbol of strength country. Furthermore, nowhere in the world has this unique architecture.
In conclusion, I am really interesting with Great Wall the most although I have visited many famous places in the world. If you have a time and condition to have tourism, I would like to recommend you to go to Great Wall and see how imposing it is. I’m sure that no book or material can show its attractiveness for you than you go there and recognize it yourself. I wish you would have a lucky chance like me for one time being in Great Wall.[/size]
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