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Topic: do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion
Our education system offers a wide range of subject like physics, chemistry, maths, languages, social sciences, economics etc. All these subjects are important in making us a good human being and enable us dischage our responsiblities as a bonafide citizen of our country. That is why all these subjects are taught upto the high school level and the we are made aware of the basics of all these subjects. We must study all these subjects and give them equal importance upto the high school level. The preferences for the subjects come only for the advanced studies or specialisation in the same.
The subject one chooses for advanced studies is solely one’s preogative. It depends on one’s interests, abmbitions and career goals. Without undermining the importance of other subjects, I would recommend studying subjects like physics, maths etc over subjects like literature, history etc. I list below my reasons for arriving at this opinion.
As we all know that technology is the word for the day and it is expanding at a very fast pace. Even non technical subjects like history etc. could not remain unaffected by the technology. Technology is extensively used for determining the age of the remains that archeologists find. Historian depend heavily on technology to find the sequence of events and corroborate evidences for their hypothesis. Radio carbon dating and fossil mapping are most commonly used techniques.
Our day today life is also affected by technology. The techological advancements have not only made the gadgets that we use a possiblity but has also helped reducing the cost and bringing those within the reach of common man.
Studying these subjects also offers bright career prospects and a rewarding and challenging profession as a wide range of careers and courses are available for the students of all intelligence levels.
In view of the above I can state that the subjects like physics, chemistry maths etc should be chosen for advance studies and specialisation. However, one cannot undermine the importance of other subjects like history, literature etc and one should be well versed with the basic knowledge of all these subjects. It should also be noted that if one has deep interest in history, literature etc one should only opt for these subjects for studies as these subjects ar not bereft of any career oppurtunity either.
TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two university instructors