Alan, would you rate my essay and let me know your views on the same.
Topic :
Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Answer :
Research so far has shown there is life only on plant Earth. Since B.C and A.D periods humans have been living on planet earth with affection, discipline and integrity. Mankind has worked for several years to make this planet, Earth a better place everyday by putting their efforts. These efforts are seen in form of facilities and developments build for better life, protecting the environment and enforcing laws.
Mankind has made tremendous progress since the ancient years and changed the outlook of earth into a better and more beautiful place. The progress is seen in form of facilities implemented for people to live their daily life in comfort and planned way. In early days it would take months to travel from one part of the world to another part. But the progress that people have made, it now takes a couple of hours to reach from one end of the world to another end of world. Another change that humans have progressed is in development of living standards. Earlier humans used to live in huts, but now people live in houses and mansions.
April 22 is celebrated as Earth Day all over the world. There are non profit organizations and associations that spread the awareness of Earth Day to people all across the world. The mission of these organizations and the purpose of Earth day is to save earth by protecting the environment in different ways. One way of protecting the environment and earth is by planting more trees and giving proper supply of water, fertilizers to these trees. Another way is by building reservoirs to store water and make proper use of it. There is scarcity of water in many parts of the world and hence stored water is used in proper manner by humans and for environment growth.
Humans are enforced to follow laws created by the society and it is for the benefit of mankind and saving the planet earth. Laws have both good and bad impact. There are laws on forest preservations, land expansions and many more. Because of these laws, we have forests that are protected and maintained around the world. In addition to forests laws, there are laws on land expansion and protection.
Humans are making progress each and every day in fields like technology, science, and medicine. They are making sure to consider all the factors without causing any harm to planet earth. The time in which we are currently living with comfort and all the luxuries is because of the efforts made by humans taking into consideration some of the factors like facilities and development in the society, protection of the environment and implementing laws to follow these factors.
Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live . What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Answer:
Research so far has shown there is life only on plant PLANET Earth. Since BEFORE THE TIME OF CHRIST humans have been living on planet earth with affection, discipline and integrity. Mankind has worked for several years to make this planet, Earth a better place every day by putting their efforts INTO IT. These efforts are seen in THE form of facilities and developments build BUILT for A better life, protecting the environment and enforcing laws.
Mankind has made tremendous progress since ancient years TIMES and changed the outlook of earth into a better and more beautiful place. The progress is seen in THE form of facilities implemented for people to live their daily life in A comfortABLE and planned way. In THE early days it would take months to travel from one part of the world to another SAME SENTENCE But WITH the progress that people have made, it now takes a couple of hours to reach TRAVEL from one end of the world to THE OTHER. Another change that humans have progressed is in THEdevelopment of living standards. Earlier humans used to live in huts, but now people live in houses and mansions.
April 22 is celebrated as Earth Day all over the world. There are non profit organizations and associations that spread the awareness of Earth Day to people all across the world. The mission of these organizations and the purpose of Earth day is to save THE earth by protecting the environment in different ways. One way of protecting the environment and THE earth is by planting more trees and PROVIDING A proper supply of water, fertilizers to these trees. Another way is by building reservoirs to store water and make proper use of it. There is A scarcity of water in many parts of the world and hence stored water is used in Aproper manner by humans and for environment growth.
Humans are forced to follow laws created by society and it is for the benefit of mankind and saving the planet earth. Laws have both A good and bad impact. There are laws on forest preservations, land expansions and many more. Because of these laws, we have forests that are protected and maintained around the world. In addition to forest laws, there are laws on land expansion and protection.
Humans are making progress each and every day in fields like technology, science, and medicine. They are making sure THAT THEY consider all the factors without causing any harm to planet earth. The time in which we are currently living with comfort and all the luxuries is because of the efforts made by humans taking into consideration some of the factors like facilities and development in society, protection of the environment and implementing laws to follow these factors.
You must be more careful about the use of the articles. I think this piece would be better if you could write more about facts rather than use so many abstract comments.
Could you help giving some points on this topics all I could think was what I have written and what are some of the ways of brainstrorming. I am aware of Word association method.
Do you think this essay would still be OK to get a score of 3 or more.
Nice Start Jura,
Global warming has become perhaps the most complicated issue facing world leaders. On the one hand, warnings from the scientific community are becoming louder, as an increasing body of science points to rising dangers from the ongoing buildup of human-related greenhouse gases — produced mainly by the burning of fossil fuels and forests. On the other, the technological, economic and political issues that have to be resolved before a concerted worldwide effort to reduce emissions can begin have gotten no simpler, particularly in the face of a global economic slowdown. What we can do about it: i. Reduce, Reuse and Recycle Less production and consumption will reduce air pollution. ii. Reduce or eliminate the use of products made with or which contain chlorofluorocarbons (CFC’s) iii. Maintain and dispose of your air conditioners and refrigerators properly iv. Reduce your vehicle pollution v. Use clean fuels such as CNG (compressed natural gas), LPG (liquid propane gas), reformulated, or “clean” gasoline, which is becoming more widely available, if it is an option. vi. Reduce consumption of electricity which is produced in a non-environmentally safe manner. vii. Consume less pesticide-dependant foods. viii. Use propane or natural gas grills, if possible, as they pollute less than charcoal with lighter fluid. ix. Use low or no VOC (volatile organic compound) products. instead use water based paints, glues etc. x. Landscape with native plants xi. Compost your household, kitchen and yard wastes.
