Hello, I would be extremely grateful for checking my essay and pointing out plenty of my errores :?
Nowadays very few people doesn’t have a connection with World Wide Web. In fact, many users of the Internet make shopping at web. This kind of activity has pros and cons, which considerably affects our life.
Firstly, making shopping in the Internet is much more safety than doing them in ordinary way. Regarding many thefts and bandits on our danger streets it is salvation for someone that fears and feels unsafely. Furthermore, it is essentially needed for unable people who are not capable to go out for shopping. One of the greatest advantage of this matter is saving of time which provide buying goods on the Internet.
In other hand, there is a common feeling that an information society which we live in, links with degradation of human ties and might be a reason of lost connections between people in local societies. Consequently, doing shopping on the Internet which links with loneliness and alienation might affects our personal characters. In addition to that, buying stuff on the Internet involves waiting for our products and paying extra costs for transport.
Taking everything into account, I think that my opinion is rather balanced. There are either strong good and serious bad sides of doing shopping on the Internet. I supposed everything depends of the individual relishes of men.
Hi nasir89, I’ve made some grammatical/word choice corrections for your essay, see the CAPITAL WORDS
My comments about your organization and writing style:
I think some of your ideas are confusing, probably you did not find a good way to express your opinions.
You need to have a topic sentence for EVERY body paragraph. Take your 1st body paragraph as an example. You only gives the safety factor the topic sentence, but then later in the SAME paragraph you mentions time-saving. Remember, the topic sentence must cover ALL the main ideas you are about to tell the readers in a particular paragraph.
Additionally, use big words wisely. A few big words used in a proper way can improve your writing, but do not throw into it a load of them just to, say, impress the readers, unless you know exactly what they mean and how to use them correctly. The same thing applies to complex sentence structures.
Overall however I think this is a fine essay. I would give it a 3/5
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