The Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information

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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Some people believes that access to much information on the internet is rather an issue that an interesting thing. Those people argue that anyone – even though they are not expert about the subject - might write about something and post this on blogs, Wikipedia and other sites providing the user inaccurate information. However, I believe otherwise – the internet is a source of valuable information. There are many reasons for this: Having access to things write for many different people might give us different point of views. Furthermore, the internet do help students to understand better things that they could understand only with the professor´s explanation.

It is very important read things under different point of views. Sometimes the information provided is biased by the author´s believes. For example, when you are reading something about the government actions, if the author does not like the politic responsible for that actions, that one will only show the negative points. Therefore, is important have other views about the issue.

In addition, the information provided by the internet is also very valuable in the education field. Many students are not adapted to the current educational system. In this case, the internet might help them with other means of demonstrate things. For example, many students are not able to understand physics only with explanation of the theories. On the internet, those students might have access to videos those help them to visualize what the professor means. Moreover, the shy students might participate of forum to do question that they had shame of asking during the classes.

In conclusion, although the internet has problem with inaccurate information, the big volume of information provided is rather good than bad. In order to deal with this problems, the people read things to different source to determine with that information is true or not. Also, I think that the resources available online is a great tool to help in the learning process of students.

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Hi Nayara, another good essay, though I think this one has a few more problems than your previous one. You have some good content and examples, but you have quite a few minor errors in grammar and usage that interfere somewhat with your delivery. Overall, I would rate this a 4 out of 5.

:wink: Thanks!!