The best things in life are free. Do you agree or disagree with the sentence?

[Chaitalivpatel]

Many people believe that you have to pay, if you want to achieve something. Nothing in life can have without losing something. However, I think the nicest qualities in life such as feelings, advice, and relationships can be received without any payment.

People claims that no one win the race if one doesn’t work hard. But does anyone try to know why one would like to be succeed? What would one have after being a successful person? Everyone is trying hard to enjoy feeling of victory. I think it depends upon persons’ nature. If one have satisfaction in his/her life, he/she can live a high quality of life who have peaceful mind, inner joy and satisfaction. To live such the best life nobody has to pay. They just need change their view about their dream and expectations without any kind of payment. Hence, certain emotional feeling are free.

I think parents are best mentor for us. Although, they always try to advise us by the greatest way, they expect nothing in exchange of it. For example, while we are growing, parents teach us so many the best things such as truthfulness, loyalty, honesty , hard work ,and many other thorough out in life with different examples and experiences that we can shape ourselves and can also live a standard life.

I think certain relationships and advantages of having them are also free. For example, I don’t have to pay for having many friends. A help obtained from friends never expects anything. Moreover, the parents love and support are also unconditional. For example, my the best achievement in my life is that I could become a dentist. But whenever I look back, I can’t see anything except my parents advise and emotional support.

In conclusion, many people don’t know what can be said the best things in life. If I have a life consist of inert happiness and satisfaction, the greatest advises and the strongest support from family and friends, I live a life that has the many best things that cost me nothing.

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[Luschen]

Hi Chatalivpatel, I enjoyed reading your essay. I think you had some good ideas, but with your writing, I wasn’t able to quite understand all of your points.Your main ideas are clear though and your essay is well organized. But you did have some confusing phrases and sentences in your body paragraphs. Your grammar is pretty good though, but you do have some mistakes in your sentence structures and word usages. Still, overall, I would rate this a 3.5 out of 5.

@Chaitalivpatel

Many people believe that you have to pay,[no comma} if you want to achieve something. Nothing in life can have [be had] without losing something. However, I think the nicest qualities {I don’t think these are really “qualities”} in life such as feelings, advice, and relationships can be received without any payment.

People claims[claim] that no one [will] win the race if one[he or she] doesn’t{avoid contractions} {or “that the race will not be won if one does not work hard”} work hard. But does anyone try to know why one would like to be succeed? {this sentence is confusing to me - what do you mean?} What would one have after be[coming] a successful person? Everyone is trying hard to enjoy [the] feeling of victory. I think it depends upon [a]persons’ nature. If one ha[s ] satisfaction in his/her life, he/she can live a high quality of life who have [with a] peaceful mind, inner joy and satisfaction. To live such th[is] best life nobody has to pay. They just need [to]change their view about their dream[s ] and expectations without any kind of payment. Hence, certain emotional feeling[s ] are free. {this sort of makes sense, but it seems like it could be more clear}

I think parents are best mentor for us. {make sure your topic sentences directly address the prompt and your thesis} Although, they always try to advise us by the greatest way, {“by the greatest way” is incorrect - to you mean advise us to take the best way, or use the best methods when advising us?} they expect nothing in exchange of [for] it. For example, while we are growing, parents teach us so many [of] the best things [qualities] such as truthfulness, loyalty, honesty , hard work ,and many other thorough out{one word] in life [our lives] with different examples and experiences that we can [use to] shape ourselves and can also live a standard life.{“standard life” sounds odd and vague}

I think certain relationships and [the] advantages of having them are also free. For example, I don’t have to pay for having many friends. A help [Assistance] obtained from friends never expects {the friend doesn’t expect anything - to say the help doesn’t expect anything sounds odd} anything. Moreover, the parents['] love and support are also unconditional. For example, my the best achievement in my life is that I could become a dentist.{“the best achievement” implies that this already happened - maybe “the best achievement in my life would be for me to become a dentist” or “the best achievement in my life was becoming a dentist”} But whenever I look back, I can’t see anything except my parents advise and emotional support.

In conclusion, many people don’t {avoid using contractions} know what can be said [to be] the best things in life. If I have a life consist[ing] of inert{“inert” is incorrect here} happiness and satisfaction, the greatest advii[ce] and the strongest support from family and friends, I [will have] live[d ] a life that has the many [of] best things that cost me nothing.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor on the possibility of life on Mars