Hi everyone. This is my opinion about this topic… It’s great to express your idea too
“Spend fewer hours watching TV”.
One of the most popular articles in news, health programs and also is the most common advice which experts always give. Watching TV is a good way to entertain, but people can get addicted to it easily which is completely atrocious.Some people insist that it may be used for educating people, especially children.
Television aimed to help people relax after a bustle and hustle day.And it does a great job. Most people love watching TV so it exists everywhere in the world. This is a main function of it.
Besides, doing education thoughout TV is an awesome idea . It can spread knowledge in a surpassing area that people in towns, in cities, in summit of mountains or in island can see and then acknowledge it. However, it turns out an extreme dilemma that is watching TV for pleasure is not the same for studying.If education programmes are broadcast, whether people still watch TV or they turn off and do something else instead. Because some people think that is tedious, not interested in it anymore.
Televisions not only entertain but also can educate…On the other hand, it depends on the way we use it,which we prefer to learn or entertain or both of them.
Hi Harlan, thanks for joining the forum and thanks for submitting your essay. Is our essay just for fun, or is it to prepare for a specific test? Either is fine, but knowing the purpose of the essay can guide me in offering more useful comments. You have some good ideas here.
Your writing is generally pretty clear, but there are a lot of small errors and some awkward sentences that make a lot of your essay sound somewhat unnatural. Also make sure to always leave a space after every comma and period to make your essay easier to read. Here are some specific suggestions:
The first sentence would be considered a “run-on” sentence. A sentence that should be cut into 2 or more sentences. In this case, it should 2 sentences. “Spend fewer hours watching TV” [This is] one of the most popular [article topics] in [the] news [and on] health programs(. It is also) the most common advice [that] experts always give.” Having the 3 ands would be considered the “run-on” part of the sentence.
You’re amazing . Thanks so much. I really appreciate your help. Actually, I don’t intend to attend any tests, just because my teachers sometimes asks me to write an essay, you know, my essays are almost awful hihi .Therefore I’ve dedicided to improve my writing skills. Btw,do you know any good websites or youtube channels that can help me in writing?
Wow Thanks so much Your knowledge is great. It’s absolutely helpful. Could you suggest me some good websites or youtube channels that help me in writing?
@Harlan: I think the most important question you should ask yourself if you want to improve your writing is: What exactly do I want so say and why? In other words, how exactly can my ideas, thoughts, suggestions or questions help other people solve their problems or live better lives? Please let me know if this makes sense to you and maybe we can turn this thread into a meaningful discussion about how to improve our writing skills and why.
wow Your comment helps me wake up after long time.I’ve never heard that before. Maybe the most important in studying English is comunicating with people,express my opinion in English then people can understand what I mean. Thank you very much .It’s great if we have a meaningful discussion about how to improve our writing skills and why
