Most of the young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.
I do not think that they would have enough experience to handle the problems in their life and they would not have any body guidance too. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time; in my opinion this is also not fair. Because they should have some ability to support themselves and they could able to take their own decisions too.
From my point of view young adults would not have enough experience in their life; because of this reason if they want independence at early age means they will struggle a lot. They would not have proper idea about life; if they have any bad influence of their friends means nobody will be there to warn them. So they might ruin their beautiful life.
They would not have any guidance to rectify their mistakes too.
In other hand; some young adults would prefer to living with their families for longer time with out taking any responsibilities of their family. Some young adults would depend on their family for their own needs; and they could not able to take their own decisions too.
According to me I would not prefer any of these two. From my point of view, first we should know how to live in society and how to handle the problems in life; I think these two we can learn from our parents or family members only. So living with our family members is very significant to me. Second thing is we should be able to stand on our own feet then only we can know the responsibility and value of the earning money. In this way we are independent from our family; then we can take important decisions in life with the guidance of the parents. So in this way both, me and my family members would be happy.
Most young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.
I do not think that they would have enough experience to handle the problems in their life, and they would not have any guidance.
Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time; in my opinion this is also not fair., because they should have some ability to support themselves and they SHOULD BE able to MAKE their own decisions.
From my point of view young adults would not YET have enough experience in their life; because of this reason if they want independence at AN early age means they will struggle a lot. They would not have A proper idea about life; if they have any bad influenceS FROM their friends means nobody will be there to warn them. So they might ruin their beautiful life.
They would not have any guidance to rectify their mistakes.
ON THE other hand; some young adults would prefer to livE with their families for A longer time (without) taking any responsibilities of their family. Some young adults would depend on their family for their own needs; and they could not able to MAKE their own decisions.
According to me, I would not prefer EITHER of these two OPTIONS.
From my point of view, first we should know how to live in society and how to handle the problems in life; I think these two we can learn ONLY from our parents or family members, so living with my family members is very significant to me.
THE second thing is we should be able to stand on our own feet… ONLY THEN CAN WE know the responsibility and IMPORTANCE of earning money.
In this way we are independent from our family; then we can take important decisions in life with the guidance of OUR parents. So in this way both, I and my family members would be happy.
Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other prefer to live with their families for a longer time.
Lots of students want to leave their parents’ house as soon as possible to gain independence and show them they are more mature. Obviously, college life is about growing up : it is the last step before the real adult life and starting living on one’s own during this period is useful to discover how to be a responsible adult. If a student chooses to live away from his parents, he will have to pay bills, to buy food, to take care of his house, and last but not least he won’t be said what he can do and what he can’t do : it will be up to him to decide whether he has to go to the library to study or whether he can go to the cinema. If he is well-organized, he will know how to deal with his new independence but if he is not used to acting as a responsible adult, living on his own can be the cause of major problems, including failing his exams. Moreover, if a student who lives on his own feels depressed, his family won’t be there to comfort him, he will just be able to call his parents.
That is why staying at his parents’ house can help a student to deal with his new life of “higher education student” : lots of things change during this period such as the type of subject he studies or the kind of work you are asked to do, and staying at home is a good way no to get confused. Besides, the student who stays at his parents’ house can gain independence too : he has to respect his family but they have to respect the fact that he is now a grown-up who can make his own decisions and look after himself. His parents won’t check if his homework is done or if he did the research he was supposed to do. They won’t forbid him to go to parties or to have fun with his friends neither. But if the student needs support, his parents will be happy to help him and to advise him.
Therefore, living with their parents is better for the students, at least for the first two years of college, when everything is new.
Is it correct if I don’t speak about me as a student ? I mean, I give my opinion but my examples are not about my personal experience. I don’t know if it’s ok or if I have to include myself in the exampls.
Dear Suspensi0n,
Your ideas are good, but your writing style, I think it’s not suitable for TOEFL. I want to suggest you to read a few sample essays before writing your essay, it may help you to understand the standards in writing an essay for TOEFL exam.
It’s ok if you don’t talk about your experiences, but you should write your examples in a proper way.
You can do it my friend, it’s not a hard work and irresolvable matter.
After all, you have the potential to become better. So, keep trying.
I mean you should follow a few standards in writing your essay my friend. For example, for writing an essay we have these parts:
Introduction: A short and brief snapshot of what you are going to explain, you write your reasons in a very general way in this part too.
Body paragraphs: you explain your reasons (every reason in a paragraph) by using details and examples and experiences, etc.
Conclusion: A summary of what you’ve wrote in the body paragraphs.
Note that the most important parts of your essay are the body paragraphs.
Oh ok I see. I thought meant that I was writing like a child you know. It is a problem of structure that I can easily “correct”. Thank you very much Mixmixi !
