Some people prefer to spend their free time outdoors.Other people prefer to spend

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Q - ) Some people prefer to spend their free time outdoors. Other people prefer to spend their leisure time indoors. Would you prefer to be outside or would you prefer to be inside for your leisure activities? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.

Day by day, in the developing countries, people have to work so much because of being in high standart of lifes. By doing this, people should be discharged in their leisure time to work efficiently and expeditiously. Some people like indoor activities in their leuise time, however i would like to say outdoors activities are much more enjoyable than indoor activities. There are couple of reasons why i like outdoor activities such as being healthier, improving social life, seeing new places.
The most important reason is that people can be healthier if they spend their time in outdoors. Because there are variety of activities in open air. For instance playing football, wandering in park are just a couple of them. While doing these outdoors activities, people’s physical conditions improve. People can feel sanitary in physcally and perfect in mentally.
Another reason is that people’s social skills improve during outdoors activities. Because people is generally in a group during outdoor activities. So, they talk with each other, share their opinion about a problem . In addition, they can learn how to be a part of team. These situations improve the social skills of people.
Last but not least people can see new places for example a place in which has an important event in the history or a cafe that is really interesting. For instance, one day i wanted to wander because i was so bored and i went out. I saw a cafe that had interesting figures in the floor. After that, i decided to enter this cafe and i liked it very much. This place always makes me discharged and relaxed.
Some people think that outdoor activities spend too much time. I don’t think that it is time consuming. When i have a splendid activity, i can spend so much time. It is not important as well as vulnerable. However, it is my opinion, beauty is in eye of beholder. My opinions do not have to be likeable for others.
All things considered i like spend time in outdoor activites chiefly in outdoor group activites. Although i have to spend more time than indoors, it is not time-consuming. Outdoor activites make me a heathy and social person as well as they teach me new places.

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Hi Kitos, im new in here and i like this site. this site supplies me many materials to improve myself.
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Q - ) Some people prefer to spend their free time outdoors. Other people prefer to spend their leisure time indoors. Would you prefer to be outside or would you prefer to be inside for your leisure activities? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.

Day by day, in the developing countries, people have to work so much because of being in high standart of lifes. By doing this, people should be discharged in their leisure time to work efficiently and expeditiously. Some people like indoor activities in their leuise time, however i would like to say outdoors activities are much more enjoyable than indoor activities. There are couple of reasons why i like outdoor activities such as being healthier, improving social life, seeing new places.
The most important reason is that people can be healthier if they spend their time in outdoors. Because there are variety of activities in open air. For instance playing football, wandering in park are just a couple of them. While doing these outdoors activities, people’s physical conditions improve. People can feel sanitary in physcally and perfect in mentally.
Another reason is that people’s social skills improve during outdoors activities. Because people is generally in a group during outdoor activities. So, they talk with each other, share their opinion about a problem . In addition, they can learn how to be a part of team. These situations improve the social skills of people.
Last but not least people can see new places for example a place in which has an important event in the history or a cafe that is really interesting. For instance, one day i wanted to wander because i was so bored and i went out. I saw a cafe that had interesting figures in the floor. After that, i decided to enter this cafe and i liked it very much. This place always makes me discharged and relaxed.
Some people think that outdoor activities spend too much time. I don’t think that it is time consuming. When i have a splendid activity, i can spend so much time. It is not important as well as vulnerable. However, it is my opinion, beauty is in eye of beholder. My opinions do not have to be likeable for others.
All things considered i like spend time in outdoor activites chiefly in outdoor group activites. Although i have to spend more time than indoors, it is not time-consuming. Outdoor activites make me a heathy and social person as well as they teach me new places.
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Good morning Can, and WELCOME to the forum. I’m sorry to say that your work is of a very poor standard. You have problems with almost everything; sentence structure, grammar, spelling and punctuation.
If you have a dictionary, then please correct your spelling mistakes as a sign of good intent. I will then edit the remainder of your work when I have time.

Kitos.

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Day by day, in the developing countries, people have to work so much to have high standart of living. To do this, people should be relieved in their leisure time to work efficiently and expeditiously in their business. Some people like indoor activities in their free time, however i would like to say outdoor activities are much more enjoyable than indoor activities. There are some reasons why i like outdoor activities, for example being healthier, improving social life, seeing new places.
The most important reason is that people can be healthier if they spend their time in outdoors. Because there are variety of activities in nature. For instance playing football, taking a fleeting tour are just a couple of them. While doing these outdoors activities, people’s physical conditions improve. People can feel bonny in physcally and perfect in mentally.
Another reason is that people’s social skills improve during outdoors activities. Because people are generally in a group during outdoor activities such as taking a trip or playing basketball. So, they talk with each other, share their opinion about a problem . In addition, they can learn how they can be a part of team. These situations improve the people’s social skills.
Last but not least, people can see new places, for example a place in which has an important role in the history of countries or a cafe that is really interesting. For instance, one day i was so bored and i wanted to take a short trip. After that i went out to wander. I saw a cafe that had interesting figures in it’s floor. After that, i decided to enter this cafe and i liked it very much. This place always makes me relaxed. I found this cafe thanks to my favourite outdoor activity.
Some people think that outdoor activities take too much time. I don’t think that it is time consuming. When i have a splendid activity, i can spend so much time. It is trivial. However, it just is my opinion and beauty is in the eye of beholder. My opinions do not have to be plausible to others.
All things considered, i like spend time in outdoor activites, especially group activites. Although the outdoor activity takes so much time than indoors, i don’t think it is time-consuming. Outdoors activites make me a healthy, social person and i’ve learned lots of places where i had never seen before.

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No problem, and thank you for accepting my criticism in such a dignified manner.

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Day by day, in the developing countries, people have to work so much to have high standarD of living. To do this, people should be relieved in their leisure time to work efficiently and expeditiously in their business. Some people like TO PARTAKE IN indoor activities in their free time, however i would like to say outdoor activities are much more enjoyable than indoor activities. There are some reasons why (I) like outdoor activities, for example being healthier, improving social life, seeing new places.

The most important reason is that people can be healthier if they spend their time in THE outdoors(,) because there are variety of activities in nature. For instance playing football OR taking a fleeting tour are just a couple of them. While doing these outdoors activities, people’s physical conditions improve. People can feel bonny physIcally and perfect in mentalITy.

Another reason is that people’s social skills improve during outdoors activities(.) because people are generally in a group during outdoor activities such as taking a trip or playing basketball. So, tThey talk with each other, share their opinionS about VARIOUS problemS. In addition, they can learn how they can be a part of A team. These situations improve the people’s social skills.

Last but not least, people can see new places, for example a place in which has an important role in the history of countries(,) or a cafe that is really interesting. For instance, one day (I) was so bored and (I) wanted to take a short trip. After that (I) went out to wanderED AROUND THE TOWN. I saw a cafe that had interesting figures in it’s floor. After that, (I) decided to enter this cafe and (I) liked it very much. THAT place always makes me FEEL relaxed. I found this cafe thanks to my favourite outdoor activity.

Some people think that outdoor activities take too much time. I don’t think that it is time consuming. When (I) have a splendid activity, (I) can spend THE time. It is trivial. However, it just is my opinion(,) and beauty is in the eye of beholder. My opinions do not have to be plausible to others.

All things considered, (I) like spendING time DOinG outdoor activites, especially group activites. Although the outdoor activity takes so much MORE time than indoor ACTIVITIES, (I) NEVER think OF IT it AS time-consuming. Outdoors activitIes make me a healthy, social person and (I)'ve learned lots of places where (I) had never seen before.
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There you go … How much better is that? I think your work is fine, and that you will do well in this Forum … WELCOME.

Kitos. 7.5/10

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Thank you Sir, I’ll work harder to bring out the best in me.