Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. Do you agree or disagree?

[qu_nh_nguy_n]

Some people think that the governments should do and conduct the scientific research not private enterprises. This essay agrees with this statement because of the benefits and the safety of the community.

From the perspective of private companies, some scientific researches which are carried out by private enterprises can lead some negative or even the serious influences on society. An explanation for this is that the company values the profit above the result and the effect of the research. Hence, the enterprises would invest in scientific researches which bring the financial benefit for them even that research can cause the negative influence on community and society. The experiment on developing fossil fuels such as gas, for instance, can release hazardous wastes and these wastes cause many dangerous effects on the environment in the long-term period, but these sources can bring the huge profit for the company in the short time, so many private enterprises would still invest in this research, no matter how it can destroy the environment.

From the perspective of governments, the safety and the benefit of society are the first priority of the governments. So government would do the scientific researches which can bring the benefits to the community and society. Furthermore, instead of caring about the profit, the governments would focus on ensuring the high-quality of product of the research and the safety of the people who use it. For example, although the experiment on producing renewable energy may waste a large amount of money and time, yet the governments still invest in it, this is because when the research completed, it will be beneficial for the environment and society.

In conclusion, governments should take the responsibility in doing and controlling the scientific research because the merits and safety of the society.

[Luschen]

Hi Quỳnh Nguyễn, welcome to the forum. I thought you had some great ideas here. Also, your format is very effective for this type of prompt. You are giving the disadvantages of private research in one paragraph and the advantages of government research in the other, which is a good format. One issue though is that you really only have one reason of support in each paragraph. This results in a lot of repetition, as you basically say the exact same thing over and over in different words. It would be much better to come up with two reasons per paragraph. Maybe add that private companies don’t have the resources the federal government has and so have trouble solving very large-scale problems. Also add that when the government does research, the results are available to a wide range of scientists and organizations, so more people can benefit through the sharing of knowledge. Your writing is pretty clear, but you do have some errors in grammar and usage. Here are some specific suggestions:

@qu_nh_nguy_n

Some people think that the governments should do and conduct the scientific research[,] not private enterprises. This essay agrees with this statement because of the benefits {“because of the benefits” seems excessively broad and vague} and the safety of the community.

From the perspective of private companies, {“from the perspective” means this is what private companies think, but this is not really what you are saying} some scientific [research] {“research” is non-countable singular} which [is] carried out by private enterprises can lead some negative or even the serious {it seems like negative and serious would be better here} influences on society. An explanation for this is that the company values the profit above the result and the effect of the research. Hence, the enterprises would invest in scientific [research] which [brings] the financial benefit for them even [though] that research can cause the negative influence on community and society. {this sentence is repeating the idea, not really clarifying or explaining it} The [experiments] on developing fossil fuels such as gas, for instance, can release hazardous wastes and these wastes cause many dangerous effects on the environment in the long-term period, {it sounds like the experiments themselves release the hazardous wastes, but what you really mean is that these experiments can open the door for increased use of fossil fuels, which would cause increased pollution} but these sources can bring the huge [profits] for the company in the short [term], so many private enterprises would still invest in this research, no matter how it can destroy the environment.

From the perspective of governments,{once again “perspective” is not the best - maybe “As concerns governments, …”} the safety and the benefit of society are the first priority of the [government]. So government [authorities/public organizations] {to avoid repetition} would do the scientific [research] which can bring the benefits to the community and society. Furthermore, instead of caring about the profit, the governments would focus on ensuring the high-quality of product of the research and the safety of the people who use it. For example, although the [experiments] on producing {“experiments involving the production of …” would reduce the repetition of sentence structure from your previous paragraph} renewable energy may waste a large amount of money and time, yet the governments still invest in it[. This] is because when the research [is] completed, it will be beneficial for the environment and society.

In conclusion, governments should take the responsibility in doing and controlling the scientific research because [focusing on] merits and the safety of the society [and helping the public is better than concentrating on profits to the detriment of humanity].