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Topic: Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think that these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s world, besides working, we spend more time and money for entertainment. Thus, many famous athletes and entertainers earn a lot of money every year. Maybe some people think that they are too lucky and not deserve to receive the money, but I personally think that they deserve what they receive. This is because they entertain a large number of people, they also have to work very hard and especially they have talents. My point of view will be exemplified and elaborated as follow.
First of all, they deserve to receive huge amount of money because they can entertain a huge number of people. Nowadays, it is true that a famous singer with flattering voice can influence a lot of people, maybe he or she can attract all young people in a nation. Thus, when they announce that they will have a performance, there will be thousand people will be interested in the performance. Each of these people will spend a little money to buy ticket to go to the performance, thus in total they will earn a huge amount of money.
Secondly, they deserve the money because they have to practice very hard. A successful athlete has to practice very hardly to achieve high level in his or her field. For example, a professional footballer has to practice day by day and year by year. Sometimes, they even have to restrict their many other activities and hobbies in order to have time to practice. For instance, some athletes have to reduce using salt in their diet to increase their performance ability.
Finally, many athletes and entertainers have great talents. Apparently that many of them can perform some very special tasks that it is impossible for normal people to perform. For example, some good runners can run 5 or 6 hours continuously. Some artists can perform exceptional tasks, such as Michael Jackson being able to perform his famous style of dance. Some painters can draw pictures that have double ways of appreciating.
In conclusion, it is true that some famous artist and entertainers can earn millions of dollars each year. Personally, I think that they deserve with this money because they can make many people happy. They also have to work practice very hard and especially they have some specially abilities.
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