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English as a Second Language English Vocabulary, Grammar and Idioms
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Hi there,

  1. The news of Cherry’s (Sandesh’s brother) death reached my ears from Sunita this evening only.

  2. According to one of his relatives, he died of unknown illness 12 days ago. I was surprised to hear the news.

  3. Cremation and other rituals had already been finished.

Many thanks

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PS:

a. There has been shortage of water here in Dharan for three days.

b. I somehow obtained one strip of Noten5 from Umesh on the way home.

Thanks a lot once again.

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Sunita informed me of Cherry’s death only this evening. I was surprised to hear the news that he had died of an unknown illness twelve days ago and that his cremation and other burial rituals had already taken place.

There has been a shortage of water here in Dhuran for the last three days but I managed to obtain a strip of Noten5 from Umesh on the way home.

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Dear Bev,
Thank you very much for your corrections.
Looking forward to more help and support from you in the days that are yet to come.

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Dear Bev,
Thank you very much for your corrections.
Looking forward to more help and support from you in the days that are yet to come.