Please Review My IELTS Essay. Thank you!

Topic:
The maps below indicate the changes to the downtown area of a town called Hanford over a 50-year period. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

My essay:
The two maps illustrate how the downtown region of Hanford changed from 1930 to 1980.
Overall, this town has drastically changed and urbanized over a half century.

In 1930, there were a large garden and sculpture park in the northeast. In the south, a horizontal road called Ellison was situated with a city hall and public library alongside to it.
Another pathway, Hudson street, went down from west to south crossing beneath the other road. On one side of Hudson street, shops and galleries were located, and a madrigal theater was placed on the other side.

50 years later, the garden and park were completely demolished so as to construct a railway line in the north connecting to Hudson street. A new art museum and the theater were placed adjacent to this railway.

Alongside Hudson and Ellison roads remained relatively the same; however, a bunch of apartments was built between these two in the southwest area.

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The two maps show how downtown Hanford changed between 1930 and 1980.
Overall, this city has changed and urbanized drastically in half a century.

In 1930, there was a large garden and sculpture park to the northeast. To the south was a horizontal street called Ellison, which had a city hall and a public library.
Another street, Hudson Street, ran west to south and crossed under the other street. On one side of Hudson Street were stores and galleries, and on the other side was a madrigal theater.

Fifty years later, the garden and park were completely demolished to build a railroad line connecting to Hudson Street to the north. A new art museum and theater were built adjacent to this rail line.

Hudson and Ellison streets remained relatively unchanged, though a row of apartments was built to the southwest between these two streets.

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