Please rate my essay for toefl

Topic: A person you know is panning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person like or dislike about living in your town or city? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

One of my friends is planning to move to my city. My city is a good place to live. My friend will like many things about living in my city, however she might dislike some of the things. There are many interesting things to do in my city, we have many good neighborhoods, and we have many parks in my city. On the other hand, my city is a crowded place and traffic jam is one of the disadvantages of living here, besides that neighborhoods are quite expensive, and our city is far away from the natural places such as mountains and rivers.

To begin with, living in my city is really exciting, there are many interesting things to do. There are many museums, galleries and movie theatre. We have many restaurants with the food all around the world. My friend will enjoy this aspect of my city. However, all these places are crowded, and traffic is always there on the way; it is difficult to get a parking spot once you reach there. My friend like to live in quite and peaceful city, hence she might not like this aspect of my city.

In addition, in my city, there are many good neighborhoods. We have many old buildings with a beautiful architecture, and many modern apartments with new buildings. However they are expensive; it is not easy to find a place which you can afford. I know that my friend has some financial problems, and she is not getting a good salary right now. Hence, she may not like to move here.

Finally, my city is far away from mountains and rivers. However, we have a beautiful park in my city. People often go there for hiking and biking in the park, and in winter they go there for ice skating. We have many small parks through out the city. However, my friend likes to live in the natural places near the mountains and the rivers. Hence, she might not like to live in my city.

To sum it up, there are many advantages and disadvantages to live in my city. Therefore she has to decide if she prefer to live in exciting and crowded place or in quiet and natural place before she move in my city.

Thank you.

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Hi, I think your essay is very good. You have a clear structure and I think your format is very effective for this type of prompt. You do not have very many errors, but overall, your vocabulary and sentence structures are a little too simple. When you use the word “things” it usually means that you were unable to come up with a more specific word for your sentence, so try to avoid it. Overall, I would rate this a 4 out of 5.

Thank you so much.