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Reading:

The zebra mussel, a freshwater shellfish native to Eastern Europe, has long been spreading out from its original habitats and has now reached parts of North America. There are reasons to believe that this invasion cannot be stopped and that it poses a serious threat to freshwater fish populations in all of North America.

First, the history of the zebra mussels spread suggests that the invasion might be unstoppable. It is a prime example of an invasion made possible by human transportation. From the zebra mussels original habitats in Eastern Europe, ships helped spread it out along new canals built to connect Europe’s waterways. The mussel can attach itself to a ship’ s bottom or can survive in the water—called “ballast water”—that the ship needs to take on to properly balance its cargo. By the early nineteenth century, the mussel had spread to the whole of Europe. It was later carried to the east coast of North America in the ballast water of ships traveling from Europe. The way ships have spread the zebra mussel in the past strongly suggests that the species will soon colonize all of North America.

Moreover, once zebra mussels are carried to a new habitat, they can dominate it. They are a hardy species that does well under a variety of conditions, and they have a high rate of reproduction. Most important, however, zebra mussels often have no predators in their new habitats, and species without natural predators are likely to dominate their habitats.

Finally, zebra mussels are likely to cause a decline in the overall fish population in habitats where they become dominant. The mussels are plankton eaters, which means that they compete for food with many freshwater fish species

Lecture:

Contrary to what you just read, there are ways to control the zebra mussel’s spread. What’s more, it is not so clear that the mussel is a serious threat to fish populations. True, the spread of zebra mussels couldn’t be controlled in the past, but that’s because people didn’t have enough knowledge. In fact, there are effective ways to stop ships from carrying the mussels to new locations. Here’s an example. The way zebra mussels usually travel across the ocean is that a ship takes on some fresh “ballast water” in Europe and then empties that water into American waterways when it arrives. Full of zebra mussels, but the ship can be required to empty out the freshwater and refill with ocean water while still out in the ocean. Salt water will kill the mussels.

Second, it’s true that zebra mussels often don’t have predators in their new habitats, but that’s only in the beginning. What’s been happening in Europe is that local aquatic birds sooner or later notice there’s a new food source around and change their habits to exploit it. They switch from whatever they were eating before to eating zebra mussels. And birds can eat a lot of mussels. So zebra mussels aren’t so likely to dominate their new habitats after all.

Finally, even in habitats where zebra mussels become dominant, is the overall fish population likely to decrease. It’s true that zebra mussels may have a negative impact on fish that eat plankton. But on other fish, they can have a positive impact. For example, the mussels generate nutrients that are eaten by fish that feed near the bottom of the lake or river. So bottom-feeding fish populations may increase, even if plankton-eating fish population decrease.

My essay:

the lecturer talks about problems AROSE by zebra-mussel. he challenges the theory
given in the passage BY SUGGESTING SEVERAL WAYS TO SOLVE THESE PROBLEMS.

TO BEGIN WITH, THE PASSAGE CLAIMS THAT SPREADING OF ZEBRA-MUSSELS IS UNSTOPPABLE
BECAUSE OF HUMAN TRANSPORTATION. in other words, they attach themselves to ships
and SETTLED IN BALLAST WATERS THEY CAN COLONIZE AREAS FAR AWAY FROM THEIR NATURAL
HABITAT UNCONTROLLABLY. IN CONTRAST, THE PROFESSOR IMPLIES THAT THIS PRACTIC HAS
ALREADY PERISHED. due to the lecturer, there were not enough knowledge in the past
that ZEBRA-MUSSELS CANNOT LIVE IN SALT WATE RAND NOW THIS PROBLEM can be SOLVED BY
CHANGING BALLAST WATER RIGHT IN THE OCEAN.

SECONDLY, it was proved that, on the contrary to the reading, zebra-mussel has
predators. according to the professor, it doesn’t have any predators in the
very beginning OF THEIR settlement, there then appear some bird species hunting
for it.

THIRDLY, THE PARAGRAPH ARGUES that since zebra-mussel consumes a lot of plankton,
it certainly declines overall fish population. the lecturer, on the other hand,
posits that it’s not entirely true. HE CITes the example of some bottom fishes
that benefit from nutrients generated by zebra-mussels.

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Hi Алис Андреев, welcome to the forum! I think your essay is actually pretty good. But your capitalization is very distracting and makes it hard to read. Please follow the rules of capitalization - only capitalize the first letter of sentences, the first letter of proper nouns, and the word “I”
This is one of the easiest rules of English, so it should not be that much of a challenge! I think you have acheived the main objective of the integrated essay, which is to show how the lecture contradicts the passage. Some of your explanations though could have been a little more clear and you could have given a more more minor details given in the lecture. The more points from the lecture you can include, the higher your score will be. Here are some other comments:

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