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#1

The line graph illustrates the number of female working as a legislature in 5 European countries ( Germany, Italy, France, UK, Belgium ) during the period of over 10 years from 2000 to 2012.
. Overall, it is evident that more and more woman employed in parliament in 2012 than in 2000. The highest percentage of women, who were the members of parliament, in Germany, while the lowest number of those in Belgium.
. The proportion of parliamentary women in both Germany and France raised slightly. However, a gap number between two countries was different. The number of female members of parliament in France, which made up over 25% and reached a peak at considerably more than 30% in 2000 and 2012 respectively, were lower than those in Germany, accounted for well over 30% in 2000 and about 36% in 2012.
. There was a sudden fluctuation in the number of females joined in parliament in other countries. The percentage of Italy parliamentary women went up steadily from 2000 to 2008 and lower than Germany. However, in 2012 parliamentarian women’s percentage in Italy was the highest than 4 other nations, at below 40%. As in Italy, there was a dramatic jump in the number of female members of parliament in the UK, at just a very small percentage in 2000 and more or less than 23% in 2012. Whereas the proportion of Parliamentarian women in Belgium were found a steady rise ( at over 15% and over 20% in 2000 and 2004 respectively) and a drop from 2008 to 2012. In 2012, the number of parliament’s women in Belgium as the same as Uk.


#2

One thing you can improve immediately is your formatting. There shouldn’t be any spaces after a bracket and no space after a full stop/period. Also, the ‘K’ in UK is always capitalized.