[color=red]Dieting can change a person’s life for the better or ruin one’s health completely. What is your opinion?
Nowadays everyone like keeping fit, even men. Eating less seems to be a fashion. Some individuals think that dieting either help a person’s life better or put down their health. In my opinion, it is possible to say that dieting has its own advantages and disadvantages.
It is believed that you just should eat less when you feel overweight and unfitness. Because having a meal with no protein or vitamin can impact strongly both your health and mental health, unfortunately it is not a good effect. For example, a person wanting to diet because of her/his body will have a menu without meats, chicken, or some things else which consist of fatty acid. He or she can keep fit well, but the consequence is his/her health will become worse. It will cause heart attack unless people eat vital nutrients and minerals enough.
In contrast, sometimes dieting becomes important. As we know, junk food is always the enemy of health. But today there are many people think it is edible day by day. And these men are extreme weight gain. No one says a fatty is strong. On the contrary, fat person is easier to be suffering from life-threatening illness than thin person. For instance, scientist’s research shows that the number of death because of sickness consists of many fat persons. Thus, if you feel your weight is too over, you should have a right dieting.
Last but not least, dieting is a thing that people ought to be careful with it, because it can cause a negative or positive result. You’d better take some advices from your doctor if you’d like to have a dieting.
Hi Tieuthusoomi, welcome to the forum. I think your essay is pretty good. You have good content and have addressed the prompt well. For TOEFL essays, they usually want you to address either one side or the other, but for the IELTS, talking about both sides of the issue is fine. You have many good ideas with details to back them up. I don’t think your presentation is as good as your content though. Your vocabulary is pretty basic and you have some words used incorrectly as well as have several incorrectly structured phrases. I think your essay is too assertive in some places, you can’t for instance say that all people who eat junk food are fat. Overall, I would rate this a band 5, maybe a 5.5