Your manager asked you to provide feedback in writing on the company performance and also to give suggestions for improvement that will lead to better results. Write a letter and include the following:
give one possible suggestion.
say how it will benefit the company.
explain what is required for its implementation.
Dear My Smite,
I am writing with regard to your request about provide feedback on company performance.
After analyzing all procedures which have done in our company and performances of employees, I have concluded that although our performance seems to be impressive, it does not have significant increase in comparison with last year.
I believe we could change this matter by doing some simple changes. The most remarkable change could be defining a prize such as round trip to Kish Island for the best employee of year. The prize would give employees enough motivation to do their best to deities. So, they are encouraged to increase their performance and in the end overall performance is increased.
For implement the prize, at the first we should publish it in our website and in next step we had better to announce regularly report of employees’ performance to them. In the end in our anniversary New Year party, give the prize to the best employee.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.
Hi Minooee, I thought your letter was pretty effective and I was very impressed by your employee of the year suggestion. Your ideas were fairly clear, but you did have a few head scratchers, like “deities” and some grammatical mistakes. Overall, I would rate this a band 6.