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No matter what levels of education we are in and what schools we are studying in, most of education training centers often give us vacations between terms. Getting away or having comfortable minutes with our family members or close friends in these occasions is wonderful. However, when it comes to whether we should take a really long vacation per year or we should feed off several short vacations throughout year, different people have different choices. With me, I prefer having short vacations because of two following reasons.
Firstly, short vacations can help students decrease/lessen pressures/depression from their overloaded study, hard examinations and parents’ desires better than a long vacation. Speaking of study pressures, students always live in a tense state in which they have to cope with a plenty of continuous problems, a series of required knowledge they must study and a chain of examination they must take is ruining children’s pure mind day by day. To deal with this, one short vacation will be capable of giving a hand to these children who are in need of help to decreases/lessens these stresses. The students will have enough time to adapt to occurrence and balance their daily life also their academic study after sorrows. If there is only one long vacation per year, the students will only have one chance to face one stress while continuous matters happen steadily during the terms.
Secondly, without a doubt, short vacations make both students and their parents arrange plans for travels more easily than one long vacation. The parents can send their children to short term holiday camps or just have them travel around, and the students in universities can take short tours to domestic vacation spots. Such travels cost less money and are more available than long tours. Take my relationship for an example. Last summer holiday, my ant wanted to send my cousin to “America summer trip” because she did not have time to care of him in approximated 3 months. However, it was not easy to find a good slot due to required length of that holiday.
As a matter of fact, one long vacation per year has also some advantages. For example, students can enjoy their vacation with extracurricular activities while take a fixed part time for next term tuition. Nevertheless, from the analysis above, some short vacations throughout year have more remarkable advantages than one long vacation per year. Therefore, I recommend that the schools should give students short holidays between terms/semesters.
Thank you Kitosdad for your previous correction . I know I need more try.
Hope you would grade this essay for me. Thank you very much.
No matter what levels of education we are in(,) and what schools we are studying in, most of THE education training centers often give us vacations between terms. Getting away or having comfortable minutes with our family members or close friends ON these occasions is wonderful. However, when it comes to whether we should take a really long vacation per year or we should feed off several short vacations throughout year, different people have different choices. With me, I prefer having short vacations because of THE two following reasons.
Firstly, short vacations can help students decrease/lessen pressures/depression from their overloaded study, hard examinations and parents’ desires, better than a long vacation. Speaking of study pressures, students always live in a tense state in which they have to cope with a plenty of continuous problems, a series of required knowledge they must study and a chain of examination they must take is ruining children’s pure mindS day by day. To deal with this, one short vacation will be capable of giving a hand to these children who are in need of help to decrease/lessen these stresses. The students will have enough time to adapt to occurrence and balance their daily life AND also their academic study after sorrows. If there is only one long vacation per year, the students will only have one chance to face one stress while continuous matters happen steadily during the terms.
Secondly, without a doubt, short vacations make both students and their parents arrange plans for travels more easily than one long vacation. The parents can send their children to short term holiday camps, or just have them travel around, and the students in universities can take short tours to domestic vacation spots. Such travels cost less money and are more READILY available than long tours. Take my relationship AS an example. Last summer holiday, my aUnt wanted to send my cousin to AN “America summer trip” because she did not have time to care of him FOR approximateLY 3 months. However, it was not easy to find a good slot due to THE required length of that holiday.
As a matter of fact, one long vacation per year has also some advantages. For example, students can enjoy their vacation with extracurricular activities while take a fixed part time JOB TO HELP PAY for next termS tuition FEES. Nevertheless, from the analysis above, some short vacations throughout year have more remarkable advantages than one long vacation per year. Therefore, I recommend that the schools should give students short holidays between terms/semesters.
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Much better than you think Pukins.