''Modern society and quest for human happiness''CAT W essay.

[Huriahkh]

Q:Write an essay in response to reading passage. In your essay, write the summary of passage and you should also develop your essay in response to one of important ideas of the author.
My response: Some people agree that rich people are happier than poor people, while others contends that money does not bring the happiness. According to essay ‘‘Modern Society and Quest for Human Happiness’’, by Dalali Lama, people living in developed countries and tend to be richer are less satisfied than those living in underdeveloped countries and are poor. The author mentions that although rich
people look happy and spend more luxurious life externally, they are not contented with what they have internally and want to earn more wealth. On the otherhand, poor people are more satisfied despite of having suffering of life, because they have less expectations of life. Although Lama has made a good point that people who are poor and live in agrarian society are happier than those who are wealthy and live in developed society , I refutes with the author that poor people of country with low standard of living are less anxious than wealthy people of industrialized countries.

I had some relatives back in my native country, who are so poor even they donot have enough money for basic necessity of life such as food ,cloth and shelter. They live in a house with a floor made of dirt because they cannot buy bricks. They were spending miserable lives because the government of the underdeveloped country donot provide benefits to poor people as the government of developed country.Some times they have to starved. .As a result ,most people of my country want to migrate to the USA for better quality of life.
Based on my personal experience, I think that wealthy people of an industrialized country are happier and contented than poor people of agrarian country.

Poor people in underdeveloped country die because they cannot afford the expensive treatment for many deadly diseases such as cancer, heart diseases, tuberculosis.
I remembered one of my neighbor in my country where I grew in who had a cancer. His parents are so poor that they could not buy medicines for his son. At last, cancer the took life of this poor boy . I think that if Lama had a experience of living in developed country, he would understand what are the sufferings of poor people in such countries.

In short, I disagree with the author that people who are wealthy and live in countries with high standard of living are more anxious than the people who are poor and live in countries with low standard of living. How people can be happy if they donot have enough money for the food, cloth, shelter and for the treatment of their sick children?

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[Luschen]

Hi Huriahkh, I think your content was very good on this one. You did have some mistakes in grammar and verb tense, but overall your writing was very clear.

@Huriahkh

Q:Write an essay in response to reading passage. In your essay, write the summary of passage and you should also develop your essay in response to one of important ideas of the author.
My response: Some people agree that rich people are happier than poor people, while others contends that money does not bring the happiness. According to essay ‘‘Modern Society and Quest for Human Happiness’’, by [the] Dala[i ] Lama, people living in developed countries and [who] tend to be richer are less satisfied than those living in underdeveloped countries and are poor. The author mentions that although rich
people look happy and spend more luxurious life{“spend more luxurious life” is not correct} externally, they are not contented with what they have internally and want to earn more wealth. On the otherhand{two words}, poor people are more satisfied despite of having suffering [in]of life, because they have less expectations{“less expectation of” or “fewer expectations in”} of life. Although Lama {this is not a name, but a title, so you have to use the whole thing} has made a good point that people who are poor and live in agrarian societ[ies] are happier than those who are wealthy and live in [a] developed society , I refutes with{“refute with” is incorrect, you refute an idea or refute a point} the author that poor people of countr[ies] with low standard[s ] of living are less anxious than wealthy people of industrialized countries.

I had some relatives back in my native country, who are {“have … are” or “had … were”} so poor even they donot{two words} [even] have enough money for basic necessit[ies] of life such as food ,cloth[ing] and shelter. They live in a house with a floor made of dirt because they cannot buy bricks. They were spending miserable lives because the government of the[ir] underdeveloped country d[id] not provide benefits to poor people as the government[s ] of developed countr[ies do].Some times{one word} they have to starved.{“had to starve” sounds odd - better to say “they had not choice but to starve”} .As a result ,most people of my country want to migrate to the USA for better quality of life.
Based on my personal experience, I think that wealthy people of an industrialized country are happier and [more] contented than poor people of [an] agrarian country.

Poor people in underdeveloped countr[ies] die because they cannot afford the expensive treatment for many deadly diseases such as cancer, heart diseases, [or] tuberculosis.
I remembered one of my neighbor[s ] in my country where I grew in[up] who had a cancer. {“who had cancer” is more natural} His parents [we]re so poor that they could not buy medicines for his[their] son. At last, cancer the took [the] life of this poor boy . I think that if Lama had a experience of living in [a] developed country, he would understand what are the sufferings of poor people [are] in such countries.{“such countries” means the developed countries, which is not what I think you mean to say}

In short, I disagree with the author that people who are wealthy and live in countries with [a ] high standard of living are more anxious than the people who are poor and live in countries with low standard[s ] of living. How [can] people can be happy if they donot have enough money for the {these are non-countable, so do not need an article} food, cloth[ing], shelter and for the treatment of their sick children?

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