Maybe you can change your life after read it

[Lam_Lam]

Sometimes, you heard a voice in your mind, but you totally agree with that voice. You agree with everything it say. You agree and act like it’s real. You don’t know what’s going on on your mind. You’re continue do that like your mind controlled you. But let me tell you, that voice is not you, is another space of the painess inside your heart. All your memories, all your pains, all your fear has mixed and turned into that voice. You don’t know it because you were agreed with it. But it’s slow controlled your mind everyday, and one day, you will agree with everything. Can you answer the question: Who you are ? Who you really are? You’re not your. You’re not what you see. You’re the free space. You’re the universe. You have been controlled by that voice - by the inside pain in your. But. You have ability to avoid it, just by breath slowly, forcus on this moment, and you’ll feel better. Just remember: You and that voice it’s not similar. Lie down in your bed and forcus in your breath. Do you born to hurted by others ?

[Luschen]

Hi Lam Lam, sorry for my delay, I have been on vacation. Wow, your paragraph is quite interesting. I believe that the secret to happiness is being able to control that voice in your head, and make sure it says things that are true and constructive, rather that let it continue to say false and destructive things. I suppose we agree on this! Here are my suggestions:

@Lam_Lam

Sometimes, you [hear] a voice in your mind, [and] you totally agree with that voice. {use “but” to show contrast - “You hear a voice, but you disagree with it.”} You agree with everything it [says]. You agree and act like [that voice is] real. {to me it was a bit unclear if “it” still referred to the voice or now referred to what it was saying} You don’t know what’s going on on your mind. [You] continue do that like your mind controlled [to act like your mind is controlling] you. {it this what you meant? It was unclear to me} But let me tell you, that voice is not you[; it is] another space {“space” sounds odd here - maybe just “it is the pain that lives inside your heart”} of the [pain] inside your heart. All your memories, all your pains, all your fear has mixed [together] and turned into that voice. You don’t know it because you were agreed [agree] with it. But [it is slowly controlling] your mind {I would add “more and more” here} [every day], {“everyday” is an adjective} and one day, you will agree with everything [it says]. Can you answer the question: [Who are you?] Who you [are] really are? You’re not [you]. You’re not what you see. {this is unclear - do you mean “you are not that voice that you hear”?} You’re the free space. {this is a bit unclear to me - maybe “you are the empty space between the words”? } You’re the universe. You have been controlled by that voice - by the inside pain in your [pain inside you]. [But you] have ability to avoid it, just by [breathing] slowly[;] [focus] on this moment, and you’ll feel better. Just remember: You and that voice [are] not similar. Lie down in your bed and [focus on] your breath. Do you born to hurted by others [Were you born to be hurt by others?]

[AEI]

Hi Lam_Lam,

You wrote a very descriptive and interesting post! I like the idea of being able to simply breathe and try to get through this crisis. Additionally, Luschen, you did an excellent job critiquing Lam_Lam’s initial post. Both posts made for a very interesting read. Good job!