Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?

[Le_Khoi]

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It is true that there are more overseas tourists paying visit to museums and historical sites than local residents these days. This essay aims to analyze the reasons behind this trend and put forward some feasible solutions to attract the attention of the locals.
There are two primary reasons discouraging local people from visiting museums. To start with, being the locals, many assume they are accustomed to the customs and historical landmarks, thus having profound insights about them. As a result, the majority of natives seem to lack enthusiasm and excitement with regard to visiting these sites. On the other hand, foreigners are generally captivated by traditional values of new regions and therefore they are inclined to go to such destinations. Another reason stems from historical attractions themselves. Due to funding crisis, many historical spots are poorly conserved and visually remain unchanged throughout years, which fails to impress and engage the locals.
Nevertheless, there are various steps that governments could take to tackle this issue. Firstly, it is advisable that the governments should allocate funds to preserve collections and renovate museum layout. This will not only result in the enhancement of museum experience but it will also attract more visitors. The second resolution would be the use of marketing strategy. For instance, the authority can launch campaigns aiming at promoting beautiful sites and upholding their historical values to attract substantial public attention.
In conclusion, although historical areas and museums usually attract foreigners instead of local citizens, many measures can be taken to stimulate the locals to visit these places.

[Luschen]

Hi Le Khoi, another good essay. You have a very effective format here and have addressed the prompt correctly. I liked your reasons and your explanations are clear. You do have a few odd word choices and you have repeated “locals” quite a lot - try to introduce some variety, even if only mixing up the phrases you use, like “those who live nearby” or “nearby residents” or “those residing close to the landmarks”. Also, it would be nice if you could have a little higher word count. You are just over 250, which makes it hard to have a really good development. For instance, a short example of the funding crises effects and another sentence in your conclusion would have been good additions. Here are some specific comments:

@Le_Khoi

It is true that there are more overseas {in your paraphrase, be sure not to add additional information not actually in the prompt. The prompt is not specifically about international tourism, so maybe “out of town visitors” might be better} tourists paying [visits] to museums and historical sites than local residents these days. This essay aims to analyze the reasons behind this trend and put forward some feasible solutions to attract the attention of the locals.
There are two primary reasons discouraging local people from visiting museums. To start with, being the locals, many assume they are accustomed to the customs {“accustomed to the customs” sounds a bit odd - maybe “familiar/well acquainted with the customs” are better} and historical landmarks, thus having profound insights{“profound insights” sounds odd here - profound insight means very deep and spiritual, something a guru has studied for years and nobody else has figured this out but her} about them. As a result, the majority of natives seem to lack enthusiasm and excitement with regard to visiting these sites. On the other hand, foreigners are generally captivated by traditional values of new regions and therefore they are inclined to go to such destinations. Another reason stems from [the] historical attractions themselves. Due to funding [crises], many historical spots are poorly conserved and visually remain unchanged throughout years, which fails to impress and engage the locals.
Nevertheless, there are various steps that governments could take to tackle this issue. Firstly, it is advisable that the governments should allocate funds to preserve collections and renovate museum [layouts]. This will not only result in the enhancement of [the] museum experience but it will also attract more visitors. The second resolution would be the use of marketing strategy. For instance, the [authorities] can launch campaigns aiming at promoting beautiful sites and upholding their historical values to attract substantial public attention.
In conclusion, although historical areas and museums usually attract foreigners instead of local citizens, many measures can be taken to stimulate the locals to visit these places.