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Written by Justin
(Intro)The line graph describes generally the changes of birth rates in both nations China and the US from 1920 to 2000.
(Overview) As can be seen from the graph, China and the US experienced a fall in the birth rates during 80 years from 1920 to 2000. While these were not different in terms of a general decline, It is true that the percentage of the babies born in the US was significantly higher than China.
(Body 1) Over the 80 year period from 1920 to 1935, the birth ratio in America fluctuated aproximately 10%. However, in the next 10 years, the American birth rate reduced greatly to below 5%. In the 1950s, the proportion of the USA increased substantially to exactly 15%, which was its summit from 1920 to 1935. Throughout the rest of the period, there was a continuing fall in the US birth rate, which decreased to 7% by the year 2000.
(Body 2) Over the same period, the birth ratios in China differed more considerably than in the US. China has witnessed a slight decrease of 5% before reaching the peak of the whole graph, 20%, in 1950. However, after 5 years from that period, the birth rate in China fall unexpectedly by over 10%, continuing reducing to approximately 2% in 2000.