Learning to plan and manage our life at youth

[Farshad.l.1988]

A/D:
Some people say that in modern life, it’s necessary for the young people to learn about planning and managing life.

No one can ever deny the importance of planning and managing of our lives as the key factor for success in our life. If you look at the life of the dignitaries, you perceive that they had a meticulous plan for all stages of their life. In spite of this fact, while some have a plan for their life, others prefer to take life easy and just enjoy their life. From my perspective, making a plan for our life in youth is of high importance, specially in this contemporary age.
First and foremost, for achieving our ambitious goals one should specifies his objectives and after an exact evaluation set his plans for his life. This can be really important for our prosperity, specially in the modern world that we have a lot of ways for spending our time in the youth and adulthood. Some people find their interest in painting, some find it in driving and some may find it in pursuing academic education. You should find your interest and set your plans of life accordingly. As a successful mechanical engineer, I myself think managing my life according to my plans have been the most important contributing factor for my development.
Furthermore, it should be noted that having a plan is imperative for a balanced development of a person. That is to say, we must manage our life in a way that all of the aspects of our life develop and should not stick to only one aspect of our life. This purpose cannot be attained unless we have a comprehensive plan for our life. These aforementioned aspects of our life include our academic education, entertainment, social skills and health. Honestly, I did not have progress in all of these aspects and now I really regret that I just considered my education at my juvenile.
On the other hand, those who advocate just enjoying themselves and not needing a plan for their lives, reason that life is very short and full of difficulties. We should not make it tougher for ourselves by these plans. From my point of view, however, a critical point seems to have been overlooked here. Without having a program, although we may get more pleasure from our youth, we definitely encounter much more tough predicaments in our adulthood and old age.
To recapitulate, everyone depending on their characteristic and temperament prefer to either have a plan for their future or just face whatever happens to them and then decide what they should do. According to the preceding discussion, we profit much more by having a plan in our adolescence. In this way, not only we can achieve our predefined goals, but we also can deal with different angles of our life. I firmly recommend you think about the plan of your life before it gets too late.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a Drama professor

[Luschen]

Hi Farshad, another good essay. Your content is excellent and you have supported your points with good examples. You have a lot of usage mistakes though, like incorrect conjugations, preposition choices, and infinitive/gerund choices. Here’s a little tip about choosing specially or especially: quickanddirtytips.com/educat … especially
Usually, specially comes right before a verb, like specially made, specially created, and so on - otherwise use especially. Though your writing was clear, with all the minor mistakes it just doesn’t sound that natural so I think I can only rate it a 3.5 out of 5.

@Farshad.l.1988

A/D:
Some people say that in modern life, it’s necessary for the young people to learn about planning and managing life.

No one can ever deny the importance of planning and managing[s] of [/s]our lives as the key factor {saying "importance as the key factor" is not really correct - maybe "… our lives, which makes it the key factor …"} for success in our life. If you look at the li[ves] of the dignitaries,{who are "the dignitaries"?  even without "the" here, dignitaries sounds a little vague}  you perceive that they had a meticulous plan for all stages of their li[ves]. In spite of this fact, while some have a plan for their life, others prefer to take life easy and just enjoy their life. From my perspective, making a plan for our life in youth is of high importance, [ e]specially in this contemporary age.{you use "life" an awful lot in this intro}
First and foremost, [s]for achieving[/s] [to achieve] our ambitious goals one should specif[y ] his objectives and after an exact evaluation set his plans for his life. This can be really important for our prosperity, [ e]specially in the modern world [where] [s]that[/s] we have a lot of ways [s]for spending[/s] [to spend] our time in [s]the[/s] youth and adulthood. Some people find their interest in painting, some find it in driving {"driving" seems a little bit of an odd choice in this list} and some may find it in pursuing academic education. You should find your interest and set your plans of life accordingly. As a successful mechanical engineer, I myself think managing my life according to my plans ha[s ] been the most important contributing factor for my development.
Furthermore, it should be noted that having a plan is imperative for a{"the" is better here} balanced development of a person. That is to say, we must manage our life in a way that all of the aspects of our life develop and should not stick to only one aspect of our life.{this sounds a little odd, like "the aspects should not stick to only one aspect"} This purpose cannot be attained unless we have a comprehensive plan for our life. These aforementioned aspects of our life include our academic education, entertainment, social skills and health. Honestly, I did not have progress in all of these aspects and now I really regret that I just considered my education [during my youth] [s]at my juvenile.[/s]
On the other hand, those who advocate just enjoying themselves and not needing a plan for their lives, reason that life is very short and full of difficulties[, that ]{it was not completely clear that this was related to your previous statement} we should not make it tougher for ourselves by these plans. From my point of view, however, a critical point seems to have been overlooked here. Without having a program, although we may get more pleasure from our youth, we [will] {I think with the "may", it is better to use the "will" here} definitely encounter much more tough {do you mean "encounter much tougher …" or "encounter even more tough …"?  a little ambiguous} predicaments in our adulthood and old age.
To recapitulate, everyone[,] depending on their characteristic{"personality" seems better} and temperament[,] prefer[s ] to either have a plan for their future or just face whatever happens to them and then decide what they should do. According to the preceding discussion, we profit much more by having a plan in our adolescence. In this way, not only [s]we[/s] can [we] achieve our predefined goals, but we also can deal with different angles of our life. I firmly recommend you think about the plan of {"for" seems better here} your life before it gets too late.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a Drama professor