It is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life.

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With the development of society, there is an increasing number of people are concerning over what kind of movies are worth watching. Some people firmly believe that it is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life. This is where the controversy arises. Some other people stand on the ground that movies that can make us more relaxed and make us happy, such as comedies, are also worth watching as well as movies can increase our knowledge about something we consider to be important. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with the latter one with the following reasons.

The first reason that I am trying to convey to prove that it’s not only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life is that some movies, such as comedies, are sometimes more beneficial for people since that kind of movies undoubtedly help people reduce a lot of pressure from every direction in life. For example, I always feel tired and under stress because it’s really hard for a student like me to keep a position as a top student in school, there is a lot of pressure. But when I feel down and feel exhausted, I will always watch comedies as entertainment, which will help me tremendously to be more relaxed and I will get my strength back again to fight for my goal.

Among the reasons that I am trying to emphasize is the one that movies that can help us to accumulate knowledge and increase our understandings of the things which we consider to be of important are also worth watching due to the fact that with the increased knowledge and understandings we can handle and solve difficult problems successfully that we encounter every day. For example, since I am really interested in history, I am really fond of watching movies about the subject, which have helped me enormously all those years because when I understand the history I would never make the same mistakes that had happened in the history.

However, as every coin has two sides, we cannot simply deny the fact that it actually is worth watching the movies that can help teach us about real life because there is no doubt that we cannot get out of the life we are having. Therefore, what we have to do is to be informed about really life and watching that kind of movies is the best way to understand real life. But, anyway, they are not the only movies worth watching.

From what have been discussed above, we can safely come to the conclusion that there are divers kinds of movies that are also worth watching, such as comedies, apart from the movies that can help us understand real life owing to the fact that we need to learn other things too which are equally important with the things that can help us understand real life, and sometimes we need to rest, which can be attainable by watching movies that can make us relaxed.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two students in a chemistry class

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With the development of society, there is an increasing number of people WHO are concernED over what kind of movies are worth watching. Some people firmly believe that it is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life. This is where the controversy arises. Some other people stand on the ground that movies that can make us more relaxed and make us happy, such as comedies, are also worth watching(,) as well as movies THAT can increase our knowledge about something we consider to be important. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with the latter one with FOR the following reasons.

The first reason that I am trying to convey to prove that it’s not only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life is that some movies, such as comedies, are sometimes more beneficial for people since that kind of movie undoubtedly helpS people reduce a lot of pressure from every direction in THEIR LIVES. For example, I always feel tired and under stress because it’s really hard for a student like me to keep a position as a top student in school WHERE there is a lot of pressure. But When I feel down and feel exhausted, I will always watch comedies as entertainment, which will help me tremendously to beCOME more relaxed and I will get my strength back again to fight for my goal.

Among the reasons that I am trying to emphasize is the one that movies that can help us to accumulate knowledge and increase our understandings of the things which we consider to be of important are also worth watching due to the fact that with the increased knowledge and understandings we can handle and solve THE difficult problems successfully that we encounter every day SUCCESSFULLY. For example, since I am really interested in history, I am really fond of watching movies about the subject, which have helped me enormously all those years because when I understand the history I would never make the same mistakes that had happened in the history.

However, as every coin has two sides, we cannot simply deny the fact that it actually is worth watching the movies that can help teach us about real life(,) because there is no doubt that we cannot get out of the life we are having. Therefore, what we have to do is to be informed about really REAL life(,) and watching that kind of MOVIE is the best way to understand real life. But, anyway, HOWEVER, they are not the only movies worth watching.

From what have been discussed above, we can safely come to the conclusion that there are diversE kinds of movies that are also worth watching, such as comedies(.)
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I simply cannot believe that you thought that this was an acceptable sentence!

“Apart from the movies that can help us understand real life owing to the fact that we need to learn other things too which are equally important with the things that can help us understand real life, and sometimes we need to rest, which can be attainable by watching movies that can make us relaxed.”

Kitos. 6/10

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With the development of society, there is an increasing number of people WHO are concernED over what kind of movies are worth watching. Some people firmly believe that it is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life. This is where the controversy arises. Some other people stand on the ground that movies that can make us more relaxed and make us happy, such as comedies, are also worth watching(,) as well as movies THAT can increase our knowledge about something we consider to be important. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with the latter one with FOR the following reasons.

The first reason that I am trying to convey to prove that it’s not only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life is that some movies, such as comedies, are sometimes more beneficial for people since that kind of movie undoubtedly helpS people reduce a lot of pressure from every direction in THEIR LIVES. For example, I always feel tired and under stress because it’s really hard for a student like me to keep a position as a top student in school WHERE there is a lot of pressure. But When I feel down and feel exhausted, I will always watch comedies as entertainment, which will help me tremendously to beCOME more relaxed and I will get my strength back again to fight for my goal.

Among the reasons that I am trying to emphasize is the one that movies that can help us to accumulate knowledge and increase our understandings of the things which we consider to be of important are also worth watching due to the fact that with the increased knowledge and understandings we can handle and solve THE difficult problems successfully that we encounter every day SUCCESSFULLY. For example, since I am really interested in history, I am really fond of watching movies about the subject, which have helped me enormously all those years because when I understand the history I would never make the same mistakes that had happened in the history.

However, as every coin has two sides, we cannot simply deny the fact that it actually is worth watching the movies that can help teach us about real life(,) because there is no doubt that we cannot get out of the life we are having. Therefore, what we have to do is to be informed about really REAL life(,) and watching that kind of MOVIE is the best way to understand real life. But, anyway, HOWEVER, they are not the only movies worth watching.

From what have been discussed above, we can safely come to the conclusion that there are diversE kinds of movies that are also worth watching, such as comedies(.)
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I simply cannot believe that you thought that this was an acceptable sentence!

“Apart from the movies that can help us understand real life owing to the fact that we need to learn other things too which are equally important with the things that can help us understand real life, and sometimes we need to rest, which can be attainable by watching movies that can make us relaxed.”

Kitos. 6/10

ps. Do not book your TOEFL exam for a long time. You have much work to do.

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I think I have mistakenly omitted one sentence in the last paragraph.

Is that artical really that bad? I am gonna take the TOEFL in a month.9ou

Thanks for your help.

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One month gives you enough time to become a good writer. Your punctuation and spelling are good, it is only the content and structure we have to improve.
I suggest you write ONE essay each day. Review your work closely before your post it, and make sure it is the BEST you can do. We can then work on it together … OK?