IS THERE TOO MUCH OF COMMERCIALISM IN THE INTERNET?

IS THERE TOO MUCH OF COMMERCIALISM IN THE INTERNET?

As the world becomes technologically advanced, computer plays a significant role in various aspects, in terms of the business. Nowadays, we can see that there are many of commercial activities in the internet such as product advertising. This holds a considerable discussion amongst group people. Some people believe that this provides plenty benefits, while other people totally disagree with this.

For those who are in favor of commercialism in internet do so, because internet is a worldwide. Many people can view any kind of advertisings on the websites, as well as possible of online trading. Hence, this is very useful for both customer and seller. Also, some advertisements may be a useful source of information for customers. Moreover, a cyber-banking on the website is a very useful service. Instead of having to go to the bank, the businessman can access to the internet, in order to complete his transaction. Not only can a commercial in the internet make our lives become easier, but it also makes make some service become more accessible. For instance, a booking service for airplane ticket is available on the website. Just a click of mouse, we can book our airplane tickets.

On the other hand, some people totally disagree with this due to the reason the commercialism in the internet seems to be source of harassment. Sometimes, the advertising keeps on appearing on our computer screen, though we don’t want to see it. Similarly, some advertising may be misled that creates a misconceived among group customer. To make a purchase of good or service in the internet are very risky. For example, the customer received the good. Furthermore, there is also a possible of cybercrime, such as hacking of personal email. In most cases, people were deceived to transfer large amount money via online bank account.

Although, commercialism in the internet creates a lot negative impact on people, there are still many good advantages in terms of accessible of service. I would say that without all commercial activities in the internet, our lives could be more difficult. In fact, these commercial activities increase the choice for goods and services. Hence, we will benefit from varieties of good and service. Personally, I believe the adavantages of commercialism in the internet outweigh the disadvantages.

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IS THERE TOO MUCH OF COMMERCIALISM ON THE INTERNET?

As the world becomes technologically advanced, computerS play a significant role in various aspects, in terms of the business. Nowadays, we can see that there are many of commercial activities ON the (I)nternet, such as product advertising. This holds a considerable discussion amongst A group people. Some people believe that this provides plenty OF benefits, while other people totally disagree with this.

For those who are in favor of commercialism ON THE (I)nternet do so because THE (I)nternet is a worldwide MEDIUM. Many people can view any kind of advertisings on the websites, as well as THE possiblY of on-line trading. online. Hence, this is very useful for both customer and seller. Also, s Some advertisements may be a useful source of information for customers. Moreover, a cyber-banking on the website is a very useful service. Instead of having to go to the bank, the businessman can access to the (I)nternet in order to complete his transaction. Not only can a commercial ON the (I)nternet make our lives become easier, but it also makes make some serviceS become more accessible. For instance, a booking service for air-plane ticket is available on the website. WITH just a click of OUR mouse, we can book our air-plane tickets.

On the other hand, some people totally disagree with this due to the reason the commercialism ON the (I)nternet seems to be A source of harassment. Sometimes the advertising keeps on appearing on our computer screenS, ALthough we do NOT want to see it. Similarly, some advertising may be misleAdING IN that ITcreates a misconcEPTION among group customerS. To make a purchase of goodS or serviceS ON the (I)nternet IS very risky. For example, the customer OFTEN DOES NOT receive the goodS. Furthermore, there is also a possible of cyber-crime, such as THE hacking of personal email. In most cases, people were deceived INto transferRING large SUMS OF money via THEIR on-line bank account.

Although, commercialism ON the (I)nternet creates a lot OF negative impactS on people, there are still many good advantages in terms of THE accessibILITY of serviceS. I would say that without all commercial activities ON the (I)nternet, our lives WOULD be more difficult. In fact, these commercial activities increase the choice OF goods and services. Hence, we will benefit from varieties of goodS and serviceS. Personally, I believe the advantages of commercialism ON the (I)nternet outweigh the disadvantages.
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It would appear that you never read the other essays on this thread, otherwise you would know that it is ON THE INTERNET, and that INTERNET is always written with a capital I and not “i”.
Stop guessing where comma’s are placed. Try Google for an insight to their correct usage.

Kitos. 7.5/10

Sorry for the late reply…Also, sorry for letting you down…I actually went through many essays…For this essay,i got confused by the word ‘in’ (topic name)…Anyhow, I really thank you for checking my work!!