Integrated writing Graffiti artists

English as a Second Language Preparation for and help with the TOEFL® Test and
1

Hello everybody, hi Kitos

Both the reading passage the listening passage is about graffiti artists. While the reading passage supports graffiti artists, the listening passage disagrees with this kind of art.

The reading passage wonders why graffiti artists are opposed and criticized by people although they express themselves through their arts. However, the listening passage advocates the opposition and goes on to say that they are not artists because they break laws and they destroy private and public places by putting their nicknames in the wall and so on.

The reading passage compares graffiti artists to the artists Christo and goes on to say that both of them have the same desire that motivate them to transfer any scene to art. However, the listening passage disagrees with this comparison and says that it is not fair and reasonable to compare the creative artist Christo with graffiti artist because Christo is always careful to get a permission from government which takes long time and sometimes he do not have it, and not only that he always take down his painting after some weeks, while graffiti artists do not ask for permission and they do not usually clean their staff.

The reading passage suggests to encourage graffiti artists and to hire the best of them to train the young artists. While the listening passage disagrees with encouraging graffiti artists and instead, it suggests stopping graffiti artists and making punishments for them, the listening passage admits although there are some graffiti artists who are creative, it suggests to encourage them to do another kind of art.

TOEFL listening lectures: What is one problem with contribution approach?

2

Hello everybody, hi Kitos

Both the reading passage the listening passage is about graffiti artists. While the reading passage supports graffiti artists, the listening passage disagrees with this kind of art.

The reading passage wonders why graffiti artists are opposed and criticized by people(,) although they express themselves through their arts. (WHO DO,THE PEOPLE OR THE GRAFFITI ARTISTS? YOU MUST MAKE THIS MORE CLEAR SG.)

However, the listening passage advocates the opposition(,) and goes on to say that they are not artists(,) because they break laws and they destroy private and public places by putting their nicknames ON the wall and so on.

The reading passage compares graffiti artists to the ARTIST Christo(,) and goes on to say that both of them have the same desire that motivateS them to transfer any scene to art. However, the listening passage disagrees with this comparison(,) and says that it is not fair and reasonable to compare the creative artist Christo with graffiti artistS(,) because Christo WAS always careful to get a permission from THE government, which takes A long time(,) and sometimes he DID not have it, and not only that(,) he always TOOK down his painting after some weeks, while graffiti artists do not ask for permission and they do not usually clean OFF their STUFF.

The reading passage suggests to encourage graffiti artists(,) and to hire the best of them to train the young artists. (TO TRAIN AS ARTISTS, OR TO TRAIN OTHER ARTISTS?) (AGAIN, NOT CLEAR ENOUGH SG.)
While the listening passage disagrees with encouraging graffiti artists and instead it suggests stopping graffiti artists and making punishments for them, the listening passage admits although there are some graffiti artists who are creative(.) It suggests to encourage them to do another kind of art.
:::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::

SG, SG, SG. This should have been a very easy topic for you, but you spoiled it!
Your meaning MUST be clear to the reader. You failed twice in doing so, plus your punctuation was poor. You really have to do better than this SG.

Think what you want to say before you start writing. When you are happy with your meaning, then go ahead and write with confidence. Please learn from this. Luckily, it is only practice.

Kitos. 6/10

3

correct me please

I should have written

The reading passage wonders why graffiti artists are opposed and criticized by people, although graffiti artists express themselves through their arts. Instead of writing (The reading passage wonders why graffiti artists are opposed and criticized by people(,) although they express themselves through their arts.

The reading passage suggests to encourage graffiti artists, and to hire the best of them to train the young artists to be graffiti artists . Insead of writing (The reading passage suggests to encourage graffiti artists, and to hire the best of them to train the young artists.

Right or not?!

4

Yes, that make is far more clear to the reader.
You MUST make your meaning absolutely crystal-clear to the reader. Well done.