In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.

[Timikebalogh]

In recent years, the world has witnessed remarkable change in traffic. Almost every adult people have own car therefore the number of cars increase every day. Some people think that it will change soon and after twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. I totally agree with them. My reasons and examples listed below with strengthen my opinion.
First of all, pollution is very big problem in the world. Unfortunately, using cars cause 50% of the pollution problem in the world and it is worse because the number of the cars increase. I think that people will realize soon that the environment will destroy if they will not no anything against it. They also will realize how dangerous the cars for the environment and then they will avoid to use it. Moreover, they will see that it will more healthier for them because the air will clean and they will move more than before.
Furthermore, the gas resources decrease every day because the number of the car increase. I know that we have enough gas spare for the next 100 years and after that we do not have anything. To stop to run out the gas sources, I think that the government will increase the gas prices to decrease the number of cars. Because of this, people will not use car because they can not afford it.
Finally, because of the technology, public transportation will develop and the transportation network will be better. These will be more cheaper and faster than the private cars. People will realize that these are more useful for them because they do not have to spend long time in the traffic jam. The using of the public transportation will decrease the number of the cars.
Taking all factors into consideration, I maintain my opinion that cars’ number will decrease in the future.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a bookstore sales clerk and a student

[Luschen]

Hi, another good essay. You have some good reasons, but you have primarily focused on stating the drawbacks of private cars. Make sure you give a little more stress on how these drawbacks will result in fewer cars in the future. You have done this, but I think you could have made the connection even more clear. Once again you have some errors in usage and mistakes in your verb tenses. Overall, I would rate this a 3.5 out of 5.

@Timikebalogh

In recent years, the world has witnessed remarkable change in traffic. Almost every [all] adult people have own car therefore the number of cars increase[s ] every day. Some people think that it{“this situation” seems more clear than “it”} will change soon and after twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. I totally agree with them. My reasons and examples listed below with strengthen my opinion.
First of all, pollution is [a ]very big problem in the world. Unfortunately, using cars {“the use of cars causes” is more natural} cause[s ] 50% of the pollution problem in the world and it is [getting] worse because the number of the cars [is] increas[ing]. I think that people will realize soon that the environment will [be] destroy[ed] if they [do] will not [ d]o anything [about] against it. They also will realize how dangerous the cars [are] for the environment and then they will avoid [using them] to use it. Moreover, they will see that it will more healthier for them because the air will [be] clean and they will move {“move” is a bit vague - it usually means move from one house or town to another, but here I think you mean they will get more physical exercise} more than before.
Furthermore, the gas resources {“energy resources” or maybe “oil resources” is better - here it sounds you are talking about natural gas, but that is not commonly used to power cars} decrease every day because the number of the car[s ]increase[s ]. I know that we have enough gas spare[to last only] for the next 100 years and after that we do not have anything. To stop to run [from running] out [of] the gas sources, I think that the government will increase the gas prices to decrease the number of cars. Because of this, people will not use car[s ] because they can[will] not [be able to] afford it.
Finally, because of the technology, public transportation will develop and the transportation network will be better. These [methods of travel] will be more cheaper and faster than the private cars. People will realize that these {try to be more specific than just “these”} are more useful for them because they do not have to spend [a ]long time in the traffic jam[s ]. The using of the public transportation will decrease the number of the cars.
Taking all factors into consideration, I maintain my opinion that cars’ number {“cars’ number” sounds a little unnatural} will decrease in the future.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a bookstore sales clerk and a student