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[color=darkblue]If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition, what would you choose? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

We all learned different cultures, values and things in home country. Even if child has been born and brought in different country, a parent helps their child to know about their motherland. Even if some countries are very small or not very rich, countries are very different in each accepts. Each country has its own tradition and culture. So If I have to send one thing representing my country India to an international exhibition, I would choose traditional Indian sari. Sari is the traditional attire for Indian women, majority of women in India wear sari.

Firstly, Indian sari is one most important pat of our country. In all around the world there are varieties of clothes and styles but sari is totally different from them. Sari purely represents India. Indian clothing is known for its colorfulness and grace. In my country I have seen some many visitors who really likes sari. So I think this will be good opportunity to know others to show our main traditional clothes.

Moreover every region of India has developed its own unique sari style, which differs in terms of fabric, weaving and wearing style. Unity in diversity shows our country culture. Same way different kinds of sari make represents single country. The most graceful ethnic outfit will help others to know more about our culture. It will attract visitors to our country. That way tourism business will grow and it will benefit our economic.

To conclude, sari will be able to represent out country culture in perfect way. Indian clothing, especially women’s outfits are considered beautiful because of their colorfulness and uniqueness. It is so famous in world wide as it is instantly recognizable and all who see it instantly associate it with India.

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We (have) all (read about) different cultures, values and things in (a) home country. Even if (a) child has been born and (raised) in (a)different country, a parent helps their child to know about their (own) motherland.
Even if some countries are very small or not very rich, (all) countries are very different.
Each country has its own tradition and culture.
So,if I have to send one thing representing my country, India, to an international exhibition, I would choose (to send the) traditional Indian sari.
Sari is the traditional attire for Indian women, (and the vast) majority of women in India wearn (it).

Firstly, (an) Indian sari is one (of the) most important parts of our country.

All around the world there are varieties of clothes and styles but (the)sari is totally different from them.

Sari’s purely represent (the female dress-code of Indian women).
Indian clothing is known for its colorfulness and grace.
In my country I have seen (so) many visitors who really like (the) sari, (so) I think this (would) be (a) good opportunity to (allow) others to (view) our traditional clothes.

Moreover every region of India has developed its own unique sari style, which differs in terms of fabric, weaving and wearing style.

Unity in diversity shows our countr(ies) culture.
(In the) same way (that) different kinds of sari’s (are made), they represent (each) single country.

The most graceful ethnic outfit will help others to know more about our culture.
It will attract visitors to our country,(and that way our tourist business will grow and it will benefit our (economy).

To conclude, (a) sari will be able to represent (our countries) culture in (a) perfect way. Indian clothing, especially women’s outfits, are considered beautiful because of their colorfulness and uniqueness.

It is so famous in (the) world (that) it is instantly recognizable, and all who see it immediately associate it with India.

Silky, you are writing too many essays. Concentrate on the corrections to your previous essays. Send me a PM if you need to, but slow down your essay output. You are making silly mistakes again.

Kitos.

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Thanks a lot for correction. yes I am doing silly mistakes again and again. Now I am going to work on the corrections.
Hope I am right this time.
Please have a quick look.

We live in a world filled with a wondrous diversity of culture, values and things. Even if a child has been born and raised in a different country, a parent helps their child to know about their own motherland.
Even if some countries are very small or not very rich, all countries have their own particular social customs, tradition and culture.
So,if I have to send one thing representing my country, India, to an international exhibition, I would choose to send the traditional Indian sari.
Sari is the traditional attire for Indian women and the vast majority of women in India wear it.

Firstly, an Indian sari is one of the most important parts of our country.
All around the world there are varieties of clothes and styles but the sari is totally different from them.
Sari’s purely represent traditional Indian culture.
Indian clothing is known for its colorfulness and grace.
In my country I have seen so many visitors who really like the sari, so I think this would be a good opportunity to allow others to view our traditional clothes.

Moreover every region of India has developed its own unique sari style, which differs in terms of fabric, weaving and wearing style.
“Unity in diversity” the phrase is widely used to describe India, which is home to multi ethnic.
In the same way that different kinds of sari’s will represent unique country.
The most graceful ethnic outfit will help others to know more about our culture.
It will attract visitors to our country and that way our tourist business will grow.
So it will benefit our economy.

To conclude, a sari will be able to represent India’s culture in a perfect way.
Indian clothing, especially women’s outfits, are considered beautiful because of their colorfulness and uniqueness.
It is so famous in the world that it is instantly recognizable, and all who see it immediately associate it with India.

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We live in a world filled with a wondrous diversity of culture, values and things. Even if a child has been born and raised in a different country, a parent helps their child to know about their own motherland.
Even if some countries are very small or not very rich, all countries have their own particular social customs, tradition and culture.
So,if I have to send one thing representing my country, India, to an international exhibition, I would choose to send the traditional Indian sari.
Sari is the traditional attire for Indian women and the vast majority of women in India wear it.

Firstly, an Indian sari is one of the most important symbols of our country.
All around the world there are varieties of clothes and styles but the sari is totally different from them.
Sari’s purely represent traditional Indian culture.
Indian clothing is known for its colorfulness and grace.
In my country I have seen so many visitors who really like the sari, so I think this would be a good opportunity to allow others to view our traditional clothes.

Moreover every region of India has developed its own unique sari style, which differs in terms of fabric, weaving and wearing style.
“Unity in diversity” the phrase is widely used to describe India, which is home to multi ethnic.
In the same way that different kinds of sari’s will represent unique country.
The most graceful ethnic outfit will help others to know more about our culture.
It will attract visitors to our country and that way our tourist business will grow.
So it will benefit our economy.

To conclude, a sari will be able to represent India’s culture in a perfect way.
Indian clothing, especially women’s outfits, are considered beautiful because of their colorfulness and uniqueness.
It is so famous in the world that it is instantly recognizable, and all who see it immediately associate it with India.

That is SO MUCH better Sandy. Keep it up!

Kitos.