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Topic: Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in group while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
People have different views about whether students should study with their friends, or just do it by themselves. In my view, both styles of studying can greatly help students improve their academic level.
On the one hand, studying in group can be beneficial to students in many ways. Firstly, friends can help each other improve his/her academic achievements by making up for some deficient knowledge. In fact, during a course, many students are usually absent from a few classes which leads to the missing of an amount of the necessary learning. Thanks to their friend’s assistance, these students can stay on track with all the vital academic information. Secondly, learning with their peers give students a sense of competition which can motivate their studying. It seems logical that almost people like the idea of doing better than others, especially when they are in a group of people who share the similar backgrounds.
On the other hand, there are a variety of reasons why student should study on their own. Doing something alone means that one can accomplish the tasks independently which can help his/her academic path in long term. In order to be successful in self-studying, it requires one a lot of qualities such as a strict discipline, clear objectives and a suitable schedule,… which are always considered as the vital factors to lead to flying colours in exams. Moreover, study alone help students focus more on their lessons. For example, with some subjects like Math, or Physic which contain a lot of sophisticated formulas, concentration is the key to help you get high scores on them. If you study with your friends, it is likely that you will easily get disrupted by the chitchat, or some other distractions that students usually do when they are together.
In conclusion, studying with your peers can be advantageous in many ways, and I believe that students should also study independently for its great benefits.