[IELTS Writing Task 2] People’s weight has significantly increased while their levels of health have decreased

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Topic: In some countries people’s weight has significantly increased while their levels of health have decreased. What do you think may be the causes of this problem and what solutions can you suggest solving them?

In today’s society, overweight has gradually become a subject of considerable concern to numerous people in many regions, especially in developed countries. This major issue is caused by several factors, however, there are feasible solutions to rectify the situation.
On the one hand, overweight is blamed for the consequence of working routines in modern life nowadays. It is widely known that individuals that work at the office tend to become over-weighing, even obese because they have to sit in front of the computer monitor continuously on a daily basis. For example, there are many jobs that using computers is a mandatory condition such as information technology and design engineers or accountants, they have to work with software programs mostly. Their jobs may lead to overweight due to the lack of motion and movement, which can have detrimental impacts on their health. Not only that, it may be a culprit of fatal diseases including diabetes, obesity and certain cancers. In addition, popular fast food containing a high amount of fat is also attributed to one of the causes of this serious problem.
On the other hand, this issue can be prevented by a few effective measures. Firstly, the government should encourage people to play sports after work or school and also exercise regularly at fitness center. For instance, companies should motivate employees to keep fit by giving coupons or free tickets for joining sports centers. If the government, businesses and local communities make more efforts in doing this, it is likely that the problem will be kept under control. Secondly, instead of eating food high in sugar and fat, residents should eat more healthy food such as fresh fruit and vegetables. Having a balanced diet may not only prevent overweight but also bring numerous benefits in terms of health for everyone. As a result, overweight as well as threatening diseases may be repelled.
In conclusion, overweight and decreasing level of health may be the impacts of working and eating habits with many individuals in today’s world. Nevertheless, this serious problem may be alleviated by several plausible solutions associated with keeping fit and having a better diet.

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