Ielts writing task 1

The chart illustrates the expenditure on fish and different kinds of meat namely lamb, beef and chicken in a European region from 1979 to 2004.

It can be seen that the quantitive of lamb and beef consumption declined over a 25-year period. Whereas the amount of chicken expenditure significantly increased and there was a fluctuation in the consumption of fish at about 50 grams per person per week.

Obviously, in 1979 the proportion of beef consumed stood at more than 200 grams per person per week, was 4 times as much as the figure for fish consumed . while the expenditures on chicken and lamb were at the same rate, around 150 grams per person per week. After that, there was a slight increase in the quantitive of chicken and beef consumption in the 1984s. In contrast, a gradual decrease was witnessed between 1979 and 1989 in the expenditure on lamb and fish.

Over the next 15 years starting from 1989, fish consumption maintains stably around 50 grams per person per week. Beef and lamp expenditure dramatically declined at 100 and 60 grams per person per week, respectively. Conversely, in 2004, the amount of chicken consumed rose to nearly 200 grams per person per week.

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Hi Rynana, your report started off well, but towards the end your descriptions didn’t seem to match the chart. You were stating how the graphs for lamb and fish were similar between 1979 and 1989, but to me they look quite different. Plus, you say chicken and lamb started at the same point, so I expected you to show how significantly they diverged, but instead you started talking about beef. Plus, you said that fish steadily decreased from 1979 to 1989, but the decrease really took place from 1979 to 1984, after which it stabilized, at least until around 1994. Overall, your descriptions did not seem that organized. Instead of saying “in the 1980’s this is what happened to these two products, and then in the 90’s this happened to these two products” it would seem to make more sense to explain exactly how the four different products fluctuated throughout the entire period. Also, be aware that “expenditure” does not really work as a synonym for consumption here. Here are some other suggestions:

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Hi Luschen, you’ve offered a great rating of Rynana’s essay, could you help with mine too? The question is the same.

The chart illustrates the amount of fish, lamb, beef, and chicken consumed in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

Overall, fish was the least eaten item compared with the other three types of meat throughout the period. Also, the country’s citizens demonstrated an increasing preference for chicken for consumption.

In 1979, the amount of beef consumed stood at around 220 grams per person per week, 70 grams higher than the figures for chicken and lamb. Meanwhile, only about 60 grams of weekly consumption of fish per head was recorded. There was a sharp increase of 100 grams in the consumption of chicken per capita weekly in 2004, whereas the usage of beef and lamb fluctuated in a downward trend.

The whole 25-year period witnessed a stabilization in a person’s weekly fish consumption, which remained at around 50 grams. Beef, the most consumed meat in 1979, was surpassed by chicken in 2004, whose figure stayed at 250 grams per person per week, the highest number in the chart.

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