IELTS Writing task 1: Bar chart. Oil

[kelvincumberbatch]

Dear teacher,

Please help me with my friend’s report. IELTS Writing task 1.

Thank you,

The bar chart compares six various contries in terms of the figure for oil production capacity between 1990 to 2010.

Overall, oil production increased during the period of 20-years. It is clear that Saudi Arabia produced oil higher than other countries, while the lowest was Qatar. In 1990, over 8 million of barrels a day was produced and rose steadily. Later 15 years, Saudi Arabia’s oil production witness a peak at around 14 million of barrel daily. By contrast, the year 2010 was saw a slight increase in the amount of oil production in Qatar, estimating around 1 millions of barrel daily in 2010.

From 1990 to 2010, oil production increased steadily in other 4 countries. The amount of oil production was around 3 millions of barrels per day in Iran, while the figure for 3 other countries at around 2 millions of its. In 2000, althouth there was a stability in the amount of oil production in UAE, the figure for oil production reaching a peak at over 4 millions of barrels daily in other 4 countries.

[Luschen]

Hi, I thought your overall format was good, and it made sense to divide the six countries shown into two groups, as you have done. I think it is better to mention the other four countries in your summary, not just Qatar and Saudi Arabia. Watch out for your number terms - it is “five million barrels”.
It is the same for billion and thousand - six thousand bags of sugar - so be sure to get this correct. Most of your report was fairly clear, apart from the last sentence, which seemed factually inaccurate. Here are some specific suggestions:

@kelvincumberbatch

The bar chart compares six various [countries] in terms of the [figures] for oil production capacity between 1990 [and] 2010.

Overall, oil production increased during the period of [20 years]. It is clear that Saudi Arabia produced [more] oil higher than [the] other countries, while the lowest was Qatar[, with the other four countries showing similar patterns of moderate production.]

In 1990, over 8 million of barrels a day was produced [by the Saudis] and rose steadily [over the ensuing years]. Later 15 years [later], Saudi Arabia’s oil production [witnessed] a peak {a peak is when a value reaches a high point and then decreases -this is not the case here - likely the production continued to increase in the future} at around 14 million of [barrels]daily. By contrast, the year 2010 was saw a slight increase{this would mean that the production increased in the single year 2010. We do not really know this, because we are not given the production for 2009. Here it is best to talk about the production increasing between the years given or over a period of years, not a single year} in the amount of oil production in Qatar,[ estimated to be] around 1 [million] of [barrels] daily in 2010.

From 1990 to 2010, oil production increased steadily in [the] other [four] {it is best to write out numbers less than 20} countries [shown]. [At the beginning of the period shown,] The amount of oil production was around 3 [million barrels] per day in Iran, while the figure for [the three] other countries [was] around 2 [million] ~~of its.~ [By] 2000, [although] there was [instability] in the amount of oil production in UAE, the figure for oil production reached] a peak at over 4 millions of barrels daily in other 4 countries [in all four of these countries]. {this is confusing, since it sounded like you meant the countries besides UAE. Plus, you said 2000 when the highest production was in 2010 for all four of these countries}

[kelvincumberbatch]

Dear teacher,

Thank you very much.