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Topic: Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do agree or disagree?
My essays:
I do not agree that everyone should stop eating meat as there is no scientific evidence to prove that abstain from meat product is good for your health.
First, digestive system of human is shorter than herbivores and lack of specialized cell to absorb cellulose, the main fibers in plants. The stagnation of many strange substances in the gastrointestinal tract may lead to abdominal discomfort, constipation, diarrhea. For example, many case report in the world shows that the patients with appendicitis as spinach do not chew well into small piece and stick to appendix cause an inflammatory reaction. Moreover, overconsuming raw vegetables has the potential to be infected with worm eggs. Worms grow up in small intestine and take the body’s nutrients so patients are sick, tired. Worse, many spices enter the bloodstream to the brain or bladder develop dangerous complications.
Second, food used for vegetarian diet is based on cereal, vegetable, tubers and nuts. Therefore, vegetarian lack nutrients such as proteins, vitamins, ions that essentials for the body. Firstly, vitamin 12 plays an important role in synthesizing red blood cells, is abundant in liver, eggs, milk. Vitamin 12 deficiency leads to the number of erythrocytes in the body is low. The oxygen provided is not enough to generate energy for nerve cell activity, so the patients suffer from dizziness, headache, difficult to focus at work. The most obvious external manifestation is pale skin, can be localized in a face, a single limb. The blood circulating throughout the body gives color to the skin and mucous membrane, abnormal conditions of the blood and red blood cells alter a person’s natural color.
In conclusion, it is not by accident that a large number of people appeal to vegan products, social networks report many benefits from vegetarian diet. However, no measures are optimal in life, vegetarian option does not guarantee that each of us will be healthier. Instead, the balance diet of meat and vegetables to live well.