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Many things that used to be done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantage?
Humans invented machines to accomplish any work quickly; as a result, the tasks which were done manually earlier are now being done by machines. In this essay, I am going to shed some light on the pros and cons of using machines in daily lives.
Firstly, many activities can be handled automatically and that saves our precious time as well as efforts. Humans are tired after doing repetitive tasks and feel boring but machines can complete
those activities uninterruptedly and smoothly. For instance, in past for the organisations who calculate their sales in a manual way, there was a headache and due to a small mistake there was a chance to a huge loss for their business but, after the invention of computers and calculators these tasks completed without any mistake in a more effective and efficient way.
However, every coin has two sides and despite all the advantages of using a machine, there are some disadvantages too. For activities, where there is a need for carefulness and common sense, automation is not the best way. Due to the unavailability of resources like electricity and diesel, the number of machinery activities can be halted and in such cases, human activities have more importance. Moreover, to earn a profit, some companies are using machines to handle their tasks automatically and they have already laid off a number of employees Thus, automation threats to employment opportunities too.
To sum up, even though people are more reliable on machines now and are having threats to employment, people have gained more from machines in terms of saving time and doing work sharply.